Hi

I love this story

Please write that sequel you were talking about at the end. I can't wait.

Just watch your spelling and James' hair is sapphire blue not purple.

Watch your sentence wording please. Here is an example

The woman had red hair that disobeys gravity

The woman had red hair that disobeyed gravity

disobeys
disobeyed

Other than that well done on this story and please continue. If you like I can beta for you if you decide to do the sequel.

Keep writing