WOW really liked your story. I don't know about you other people who didn't get it but I did. Very descriptive. I have considered wrting a fic about Azuma when he was a pilot. I think your a very good writer. The concept was very original to very interesting to read. You sound like a very neat person to. email me if you want to chat I need anime/manga buddies, although I'm afraid we may not be able to discuss quatum physics as I am only 14.

as my this friend used to say to me "yes"..."i don't understand".

who is being saved and who is being sacrificed? sorry! i missed something in the conversation that went on in the office. reread it, and still can't figure it out.

this was a surprise as your writing has good clarity, and her decision must carry the weight of this story.

Hi there! I would like to say I like the way your fic goes...although at first I was rather confused who Rill was. Sorry, momentary memory loss. It's nice, and it made me guess who the repairer was (thought it was Rome, then decided against it. Then thought it was Ihkny. No. Finally, Kizna. But Rill?) Love the part about offering her a job in the health sector as a...consolation? So, her dear pilot must have either been forfeited his job, or most likely, died in the end? Continue writing!

The grammar was okay. There are a few errors that you should fix.

The plot was original, which is always a plus. ^^ I liked the shock at the end that it was Rill.

For characterization, it wasn't bad, but I can't judge. Perhaps someone with a deeper understanding of these two characters will be able to tell you.

????????????????? It seems good to me. Write more soon, you excellent writer, you. I can't wait because I am very confused at this point and am wondering what happens next. ???????????????