Okay um wow. Theres alot to say about this. And its not gaonna sound very nice but hun your gonna have to hear it. This BITES!

You could have made this a really good plot bunny but the way you start everything SO fast is unbelivably retarded. NO ONE likes to just get throwen into it like that.

And, how exactly doe's this chick know everything about the pilots? And how is she a ** enough to bring up their pasts infront of everyone? Imean everyone likes a ** factor but thats just rediculos. ANd beside you think th G-boys woulda let some complete stranger that knew all about them and there past waltz outta the room?? Heero woulda either shot her on the spot or forced her in for questioning.

And whats with the gay Names you give them?? Circus boy? mr. Sensitive? I'm just not gonna go into how much that killed my desire to read the story.

And the whole 'I know Relena but hate her living guts' thing. Yeah... Right. Thats just soo not belivable. I don't thik relena would stand for it.l the only reason she sticks like glue to relena is becuse he is strong and she shes him as a picture of what she wants to be. But thats cuzou oviously don't understand the deeper meaning that the relation ship is ment to pose in the series.

Oh and the way you make her refuse to let any emotion show is palin dumb. I can see like some eluctance but your makeing it sound hard core Mary Sue.

And the last thing I'ma ** aboutis your ending. 'Omae O Korosu'? One: Thats the most enoying thing you can do is put RANDOM JAPPENESE words into an ENGLISH story. Alot of ENGLISH people DON'T speak Japenses. Two: Isn't that something they usually make heero say? Hmm alot of your Char seems to be based on Mr. Yuy. Why don;t you just make Heero the main Char?

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Hi hi cuz-dear! I'm reviewing another story, aren't you proud of me? ^^ I really enjoyed reading so far, and I kinda wish the rest of it was up here so I finish it!

To Yumiko Kaze,
*ahem* What we have a Grade A nitpicker. First of all, style and plot aside, what point do you have to sit around and pick on the opinion's of the author? Why does she have to like Relena? I happen to hate Relena. If you had half a brain, you'd see how annoying the character is yourself. Perhaps Lily knowing all that was a "plot device" (you do know what those are) showing how skilled Lily actually was? *gasp* Who would have thought that was possible?!
As for putting the boys into stereotypical roles, I'm sorry but if you didn't see that the series itself placed them in those roles already, I think you seriously need to rewatch the series.

Apparently you need to get a new pasttime other than writing bitter, and rather poorly worded, critiques. Why don't you go try and write something yourself for once instead of wasting your time and ours. Have a nice day.

**
Anyways, loved it as always Lily-chan, can't wait to read more. Love ya.

Please allow me to shoot myself. No, wait, I'll put Anwe out of her misery and THEN kill myself.

*sigh* I haven't bothered coming to the GW section of this site for a LONG time and this fic just proved me why.

Granted, I am still dying of Oh-My-God-I-Can't-Belive-This-Got-Published Syndrome from reading Eros by Katie Nieland. (Read it, you'd like it) But this is BAD. Okay, the writing STYLE is good, but the story itself is a little lacking in the creativity department. I mean come on. How many friggan female hard-** "I can kick all their asses and not break a sweat" 6th pilot fics are there out there? Totally original. Note the sarcasm.

Not to mention the "I hate Relena" crap I see everywhere. And the stereotypical labels that you have oh so originally given our beloved pilots.

And back to the very very start of this chapter. How would Lily, aka Yuriko (also oh so original) have known ANY of that stuff about the Gundam pilots? None of the Gundam pilots know about each others pasts. Not even Noin and/or Lady Une (who have done the most digging into the pilots pasts) would have known that.

AND WUFEI DID NOT KILL MEILAN! She sacrificed herself to save him. That is not killing. He himself may have interpreted it that way, but he he did kill her. Self-sacrifice does not equal murder.

And lemme geuss. Lily-chan has SUCH a horrible past. She killed someone she loved didn't she? Oh how horrible! Just like all the other Mary Sues! Or maybe, maybe she was raped as a child by her father and now she's damaged and shuts herself off from all human contact in order to to keep herself "safe". And now, she needs Duo, Heero, or Wufei to teach her to open up that heart of stone, to see see herself for who she truly is, and make her FEEL again. Make her LOVE again.

I'm SO in tears.

Boo. Hoo.

And Hoo.

Please excuse me now. For I must go and rescue my dog from being used as a stress toy by Anwe--who is so emeotionally damaged by reading this that she is taking it out on a poor defenseless animal.

And saving my dog is much more important than continuing this critique.

cool story...continue soon!!:)

Hello! Another review!~ *Just being nice ya know* ^^! Lily-chan! Got bashed up!! Damn Koji!! *freaks out*

ARINA KAIUMI

Hello! Another review!~ *Just being nice ya know* ^^! Lily-chan! Got bashed up!! Damn Koji!! *freaks out*

ARINA KAIUMI

Just checking to say Hi~!

Just read all the chapters so far.but computer mousy stuffed up *as usual* *sweatdrop*

So, Lily Hino huh? Interesting. Update:

My name is now ICE in fanfiction.net

The alias/codename I went by was Arina Korino but now, it's Arina Korino Kaiumi

Or just A.K.K

Nice story, *nods* You have my approval. *sticks up thumb*

Note: I'm in science, 'researching' and I hope I don't get caught. *sigh*

Keep updating!

ARINA KAIUMI

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Just checking to say Hi~!

Just read all the chapters so far.but computer mousy stuffed up *as usual* *sweatdrop*

So, Lily Hino huh? Interesting. Update:

My name is now ICE in fanfiction.net

The alias/codename I went by was Arina Korino but now, it's Arina Korino Kaiumi

Or just A.K.K

Nice story, *nods* You have my approval. *sticks up thumb*

Note: I'm in science, 'researching' and I hope I don't get caught. *sigh*

Keep updating!

ARINA KAIUMI

"."

Just checking to say Hi~!

Just read all the chapters so far.but computer mousy stuffed up *as usual* *sweatdrop*

So, Lily Hino huh? Interesting. Update:

My name is now ICE in fanfiction.net

The alias/codename I went by was Arina Korino but now, it's Arina Korino Kaiumi

Or just A.K.K

Nice story, *nods* You have my approval. *sticks up thumb*

Note: I'm in science, 'researching' and I hope I don't get caught. *sigh*

Keep updating!

ARINA KAIUMI

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?!...my review for chapter 8 didn't turn up ^^'...oh well.

Really good (as usual).

Have to go before my dad's laptop crashes again -.-'

CU ^^ InM

P.S. If you want another review from Alice, (usually) you have to tell her you put up a new chapter...or I can tell her ^^. CU.

Hey! I love this fic! Yuriko and Lily remind me of me. Because I always try to hide my feelings to stop getting hurt from my friends but they just walk all over me. And I end up getting hurt whether I like it or not~!
Anyway. Enough of me whingeing...

ICE

Definitely too much sugar ^^'. I read it again and it made sense ^^'. And I also saw what I read wrong at the end of it ^^'.

Anyway, another new pilot. And I really can't imagine the bit with the squirt guns and hoses and stuff ^^' but it's funny.

CU ^^ InM

OK, that first section has to be the most confusing ^^'.

And THAT WAS THE END?!?!?!?!?! Aren't you going to write more ^^'.

-.- Shoganai (did I get that right? ^^')

CU ^^ InM

Sorry I haven't reviewed in a while ^^' school computers...

Anyway, it's kind of confusing now...^^'. But it's interesting.

I'll try and check back more frequently ^^'

CU ^^ InM

I din't understand how people can make their chapters so long ^^'. Mine are SO SHORT compared to yours. Anyway, I think it's pretty good except (sorry, I always pick out what I think is wrong ^^') I think you're making Heero talk to much and you're making the girls sound like Lady Une.

CU ^^ InM