Reviews for A Day of Prayer

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Leather Jacket 2008-08-04 ch 13, anon.	abuseI just found this story and I loved it. I'm not even going to bother with the mistakes other people have mentioned because the story itself is wonderful (you beat up on my poor Simon! ... Thank you.) And so much of the dialog does have a great feel for the show. You kept me reading, well past my bed time, that's for sure! I do have to mention one little thing I struggled with at first, though. When I see someone say, "ah," I usually hear a contented sigh (or a doctor's visit with a tongue depressor). When I see someone say, "uh," that's hesitation. It didn't detract once I figured it out, but please think about it for the next time.
teasers 2008-02-05 ch 4,	abuseI'm in the middle of chapter four and I wanted to stop and review. This has been an excellent story! I stopped just before I wrote this to see how far it went and was glad to see that this story had been completed and wouldn't leave me hanging. Very good so far!
SmileyMare1810 2007-06-19 ch 12,	abusehey. this was really good. thank you.
surrealgreen 2006-07-13 ch 13, anon.	abuseI loved this story! Its exciting, sweet, interesting, and fast-paced. Your characterizations were wonderful. I loved the prayer at the beginning of the chapters--they were lovely, and right on target! I hope to read a sequal!
Creedog VanDrey 2006-04-23 ch 13,	abuseAh, what can I say? You have talent. A few suggestions, though. Spelling is important. No matter how good the story is (and yours are good), misspelled words pull the writer out. Steel is metal. Steal is to take things that don't belong to you. A minuet is a nice piece of music. A minute is a unit of time. And to gaze is to stare and be staring. I've never heard of starring. I loved Book's prayers. Beautiful touch. Word to the wise. Chapter 12, the appendix, wasn't a chapter. FFN won't take kindly to that sort of thing. I won't report you, but my advise would be to put it at the bottom of the story. Also, the appendix broke up the flow between the story and the epilogue. I'd suggest some minor reorganization.
Eri 2006-01-29 ch 11, anon.	abuseI like your writing, but some of the spelling is kind of distracting. For example, you've mixed up 'week' and 'weak'; it's 'rifle', not 'riffle'; 'coiffing' instead of 'quaffing' (but that one you can be forgiven for, hehe); Speakin' instead of Speekin'. It's very distracting to a grammer Nazi like myself (you've got some oddly placed commas as well), but the fact that I've read the whole thing speaks for the quality of your storytelling. If you proof-read more carefully or get a beta, it should be just dandy. ;)
leiasky 2006-01-09 ch 13,	abuseAnother excellent story. I did scream at the computer screen when Mal interrupted the kiss...but, the dialogue after it "You owe me", " “Still crushin’ over ‘im Little Kaylee? Looks like he might be crushin’ a little back.”" nearly made up for it... Anyway, great plot, lovely characterizations and I'm looking forward to reading more. After all 'Serenity' is out now and there's LOTS of nice new Simon/Kaylee possibilites... Hope you're still writing!
Mercredi 2005-10-17 ch 13, anon.	abuseI've been entertaining myself all weekend with your fabulous Firefly stories and I plan to go back and write many more reviews eventually. But I just had to say (as I sit here recovering from major abdominal surgery) that I'm thrilled that you are putting some realism into Kaylee's injury. I think that one of the few flaws in the show is that injuries all seemed to heal just a little too quickly.
Anora-the-Dreamer 2005-10-12 ch 8,	abuseThis is a rather brilliant piece of work you've got going here. The plot and chracterization is wonderful.
Anora-the-Dreamer 2005-10-12 ch 1,	abuse'Twas very well-written and amusing, but it's prologue, not prolog. And epilogue, not epilog.
senalishia 2005-10-07 ch 2, anon.	abuseNice. Except... River didn't utter a single non sequiter the entire scene. Everything she said was completely relevent. What's up with that?? Also, Simon seemed to shift a teeny bit out of character near the end there. We know he'd do anything for his sister, right? And I'm not so sure River is so keen on always doing as he says, either. Other than that, great!
Rhade's Rebel 2005-08-13 ch 13,	abuseI realy enjoyed the story as a whole. The ending was great. Kaylee with two weeks to flurt with Simon WoHo!!:)
EreshkigalGirl 2005-03-29 ch 13,	abuseI just found this. It was cute! I loved the end.
smeg1 2005-02-27 ch 13,	abusePlease say you got some kind of standing ovation for this story? If not, shame on your reviewers for not recognising this wonderful piece of writing. You got the skills.
What's Their Name 2004-06-17 ch 13,	abusesweet, a v. enjoyable read. Am adding this to my favorite stories.

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