Though it is a drastic change from what is one of my favorite works, I really did enjoy the pairing. Many a time I have thought about those two...heh!
It was a good plot, I must say.

All I can say is "damnit".
You've ruined one of the greatest literary works with one fanfiction. One that is not too well written, nor is it accurate in any way. God, you made me sick. You should be so ashamed of yourself. Jane Austen would die again if she saw you disgracing her novel in such a way.
You are a pervert, and I hope you writhe in the flames of hell for writing such awful **.

My apologies, it seems that linking in reviews is not allowed. Well, if you search for "cologne," "fanfiction" and "New York Times" on Google you should find it.

This is amazingly... original. Did you know I found out about your story in a New York Times review of Check it out.

All I have to say is ieuw how dare you rape such a marvelous story.
shame om you

aren't they both married to a Bennet sister and hate each other? oh, well, i like the way you get into their minds...

Well, well, well...
OK, I admit, I had to skim-read this, I found it just a bit *weird* to read your, ahem, less children-friendly writings. But nonetheless, I have some feedback, as you kindly split it into rude and less rude sections:
1)Yes, what's with that? You do love that chapter function...nothing wrong with that, just different
2) Nice insertion of R-rated bit into the rest, tactfully done
3) Nice detail, e.g. statue
Basically, this is good! You have learned well, my young apprentice...(Sorry, is that rather patronising?, Hell, I wanna say it anyway! I'm somewhat high..)
P.S 'I'm Henry Fitzwilliam Darcy for God's sake!' gotta love it
P.P.S The cologne/chest thing, hee hee...v. good, his tone is very convincing