Good fic... nice ending.

(Formally Liz Swarthy) I just wanted to say thank the gods for HP Fanfic Indexes and Lists. I've been searching for this story for months now and it was beginning to drive me insane that I couldn't find it again! I spent the whole day re-reading this wonderful fic and I just wanted to say that I honestly think it was better the second time around. But enough of the shameless sucking up.

I would love to see you revisit this story and polish it a bit. It lacks a wit in the description department. There are some brilliantly illuminated places, but the rest is a bit rushed. I realize this story was initially written simply for fun, but still... And it is fun to read. I still can't get over the bathtub full of pudding! Or precariously balanced furniture. Or table smashing (I've actually done something horribly similar... It's not my fault we didn't have a stand for my snake's terrarium and the superfluous additions to cheap writing desks were preventing my snake's home from fitting on it!). I would simply like to see a bit more definition in the scenes. I'm also a bit sore about Gwen's disappearance from the story around chapter three/four-ish. She's mentioned as still being a close friend, but she just vanishes! What's up with that? Where did my Gwen go? I liked her...

Other than a bit of nit-picking, the only major problem I had was the speed at which Harry and Draco fall back into the groove. Those two chapters in which Harry accidentally wanders into the diner where Draco works and the discussion they have back in his apartment lacked finesse. Realistically, there should have been more attention drawn to the struggle such a lasting fissure would have on the two. That is definitely one thing I would know a lot about. One afternoon and a sit down talk was just too unrealistic. (I had a high school sweetheart who I was very much in love with who broke my heart in a very similar way in which Draco broke Harry's who disappeared from my life for over three years and popped back up in a situation very much like the one formed in your story -I walked into his workplace with a friend who was falling for me and looking for a job- and we ended up back together for awhile after that incident, however the struggle that took place was intense for the both of us. After a separation like that and after the way things ended the first time around, yes we were both scared, but the road to admitting we were still trying to fill in the hole that was left by that drifting was not a simple one. In fact, it took an excessive amount of liqueur and a perverted ** to make me even come close to admitting out loud how I really felt. The fear of being hurt like I was before was too strong. Even though I had felt his absence for years. I couldn't imagine how much more difficult it would have been after a separation of ten years! I'm saying this because I am just as stubborn an ** as Draco and Harry, and having been hurt in such a way makes a person highly reluctant to open up yet again. That vulnerability is frightening to an extreme. Mind you, once we admitted things, our relationship took off almost as though there was never a break, but that doesn't change the fact that the struggle was extreme for the day and a half it took place.) Extremely onerous explanation aside, what I'm trying to say is that I would have liked a bit more attention placed on the struggles Draco and Harry would have certainly been going through at the time and the awkwardness it would have caused. Yes, the situation was awkward, but for an entirely different reason. It was awkward to me to read because it didn't feel right.

I hope all of that made sense, and I am dreadfully sorry for the novella length review (old habits die hard), but it needed to be said. In my opinion, at least.

Let me reiterate that I do love this story and I am so glad to have found it once again. Cherish reminds me so much of my cousin's little girl that it's scary. They're both too smart for their own good. XD Joel is too wacky and I can't help but love him and his amazingly sporadic bouts of brilliant insight. And I've always hated Melody. Nothing will ever redeem her in my eyes. You paint such lovely original characters, and I thank you for sharing your work with the rest of the fandom.

-Liz

I was wrong. I can't take this much fluff. Sorry.

Too fluff for my taste, but I think I'll be able to keep going.

Nice. Drarry. Good. Wow.

Oh... But... Drarry? Please?

Albus winks all in the right places, doesn't he? Well, that's why I like him and the story just wrappes itself up and oh my god I'm off to read the next chapter!

Yes, yes, YES!! I knew Melody was going to just fly away! Thank you!
PS: Poor Draco :(
PPS: Loved it.

OK, I noticed that I've been using the same sentence in the first two reviews: "Damn, that was ..." and I want to start this review by pointing one thing out: Your idea and your writing are so good that I can't find different words to describe them. Just making that one bit clear.
And about the chapter, I love where this is going. I -as predicted- want Melody gone gone gone, and I'm sure that I won't be dissapoinded. I can't wait to read the chapters of Harry'y appearance and, eventually, H/D. So... I'm off to read the next chapter. Thanks for this beautiful one.

You got me at the pudding part. Damn, that was nice.

Damn, that was heartbreaking. In a vert good way.

I never reviewed this story when i first read it, which was in 2002. I can't believe it was that long ago. I had completely forgotton about my account on fanfic, and now I'm re reading all the fanfics I loved, and yours was one of my favourite.
Well done on such a good story. I loved it the first time and I loved it this time.
Louisa

i just want you to know i loved this joel guy he's relly funny and the fic was relly good too thanks for a good time at the computer /clara

hello I find yours really correctly beautiful story. =)

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