Reviews for Rules of Acquisition

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maisama 2008-05-19 ch 13, anon.	abuseIt would be really interesting to see how this story ends! I do hope that you eventually finish it, its really great and so beautify written!
brakken 2008-03-22 ch 13,	abuseYeah, for a while there I was convinced the Romeo and Juliet thing was just a premise, and that the similarities had more or less stopped. Seems I'm wrong though...Hopefully they won't continue too much longer...They might be getting intimate now, but it's at such a cost, how could any human reader feel real happiness for them? I'm way too convinced of how badly this will all end right now. I just hope that I find out how this all ends? It's up to you if you want to continue it, but know that you don't need to stop just because you think people don't like it. I've really enjoyed this story, and I hope that you do continue it, for my own selfish pleasure if nothing else.
brakken 2008-03-22 ch 12,	abuseAw...They're so cute, trying to make out after getting hit by a car/slammed into the pavement...Nice action in the beginning, the thumb wars and his own desperation to keep from hurting her were nice touches...Your creativity always amazes me, I don't know how you do it, but you take the most innocuous (and possibly, ok probably) boring activities and make them hilarious...Stakeouts for instance. Ok, not so innocuous. But very boring for the most part. Add gadgets, crowbars, creative dialog, and some amusing side comments, and you've got pure comedy. Nice job with it, I loved the stakeout scene.
brakken 2008-03-22 ch 11,	abuseDayum she's evil isn't she? Can't wait to see what happens when Miroku asks him how Kagome going out with Kouga makes him feel...That will be an expression to remember. Nice job with the dialog, and the creativity. It always amazes me how much of a difference all of the little things can make...Nice job with the absence, and then the get together, and especially Inuyasha's complete idiocy, and then of course his redemption. Undone in part by the fish, but oh well...Hmm don't cats like the smell of fish? She must not be as much of a cat as he thought...
brakken 2008-03-22 ch 10,	abuseOuchies...This chapter is quite a turn from the previous ones. It was obvious that they'd figure out each others' secret identities sooner or later, but I never expected him to react...quite like that. As sad as it is to say though, you pulled it off well, and I actually now think it appropriate. Not in the sense that it was what he should have done-far from it-but in the sense of what he would have done. Nice job keeping them in character, and in the issues surrounding them. Amazing how something so wonderful could get so sad so fast...
brakken 2008-03-22 ch 9,	abuseIntense relationships going on here, and not just between Inuyasha and Kagome- I'm really thinking more of his father and him to be honest. I commend you for your handling of the scene where Kagome rips up the film, especially the aftermath. It was poignant and sad, and strangely unsurprising that just as she wanted him to go after her, make her look at him, he was wanting just as desperately for her to look back at him. I found that part very moving. I'm really enjoying this story, so I feel bad saying this, but you really need to proof-read better. There are some very confusing sentences every now and then, and I still for the life of me can't figure out what you meant to say. It makes me sad that a writer as creative and talented as you would have her work marred like this...
brakken 2008-03-22 ch 8,	abuseUh-oh...Why do I get the feeling that Sango is more of a Higurashi than Kagome is? Nice cliffhanger again, all the implications of her lines dwarf them completely, making it the single most significant line in the chapter (in my opinion anyway). Inuyasha's rant at his father was also fairly revealing, both to his relationship with the man, and what happened to his mother, and how much he felt for Kagome. Sooner or later though they're going to find out their identities as spies as well...That will sure be interesting now won't it...
brakken 2008-03-22 ch 7,	abuseNice cliffhanger. It takes a total 180 from her melodramatic jealousy and doubts- she must really care about him to react so quickly and so absurdly. I'd call it hyperbole if I hadn't done the same myself once...Yeah, not proud of my meltdown. But it does mean that I actually read this in sympathy, so instead of cynical and vaguely amused to mildly interested, I went from sympathetic and nostalgic to shocked and entertained. I like how blunt the transition was- it added to the switch in general.
brakken 2008-03-22 ch 6,	abuseHehehehe oh that was great...I love how they have absolutely no clue who they're fighting. It'll be interesting when Kagome claims she took down Miroku singlehanded and Sango claims the same thing...Do I sense some realizations coming along? I only hope this doesn't end like Romeo and Juliet, although the tone is so light I have a hard time believing, for all the current similarities in the plot, that you're leading up to their deaths...Just doesn't seem to fit somehow, and not just because it's not something I think should happen. I liked Inuyasha's spiel about wanting to boast about having her but having to hide it as well- very amusing.
brakken 2008-03-22 ch 5,	abuseAw...Gotta love the fluff. The kiss scene was great, I liked how you described it vividly, and yet still kept it in character. It never occurred to me how doing that might be difficult, until I tried it myself. Amazing how trying to describe something through someone else's eyes and in someone else's words can be so tricky...You did a nice job with it. The library scene was fun too. So far it's working...But for how long?
brakken 2008-03-22 ch 4,	abuseOh goodness that's too good...For someone as overly and stupidly masculine as Inuyasha to become a nurse is just...I'm not saying he's sexist, it isn't a thing that he thinks girls can't be smart enough to be doctors, but just the imagery, the idea of him being a nurse instead, the stereotypes he's crossing...No wonder it's his family's joke. Kagome's anti MacDonalds spiel was fairly entertaining as well, especially the way Inuyasha seemed to want to eat the burger all the more. His openness is very refreshing as well- maybe he lost Kikyou (I do remember her being mentioned) because he never confessed his feelings, and he doesn't want to make the same mistake again? Hm food for thought. Can't wait to find out for sure!
brakken 2008-03-22 ch 3,	abuseHehehe I really, really enjoyed this...From her pretending to be a ditz and him a klutz, to him pulling her onto the dance floor so readily, to the way it worked so well for them, to the overly dramatic break up and aftermath...Endlessly entertaining. It seems those two have already fallen head over heels in love with one another, and you managed to still keep it credible, still believable and realistic with the way it happened. Nice job.
brakken 2008-03-22 ch 2,	abuseHehehe...Again, this is in some need of proof-reading, but only for minor edits. In general, I found it very funny. The two families are so ridiculous, and the line 'Blood thirsty fiends...' got me to laugh out loud, the timing was just too good. Can't wait to see where all of this is going...
brakken 2008-03-22 ch 1,	abuseHm interesting...There's a bit of repetition and some typographical errors, but in general it's well done as a set up. You've more or less explained the plot, who they are, what they know of each other...And managed to catch my interest enough with the need to find out more about Kagome's particular powers (aside from the obvious other things I'm curious about) so that I'll read on. Just as a beginning should do. I'll keep reading...
Amaya-Oneesama 2008-03-13 ch 13,	abuseAww! This story is excellent! I love it! And I hope you haven't lost interest in this story and will work on it soon! :)

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