And it begins! D:

The tension is killllling me.

Boy, this was beautiful. The calm before the storm (albeit it wasn't all that calm). You truly have a gift for storytelling. You made this story into your own.

I'm pretty sure that I remember something pretty awful about Arya. Argh, why does it have to be? Anyway, this was a fantastic chapter. Thank you so much.

I love how you've made Selphie, Irvine, and Zell. The characterizations are spot on. And, poor little fish.

Ohhh nooo, what is going on? I have to leave right now so I can't continue this story and it's going to kill me. This is leaving off on such a cliffhanger. My goodness. You write suspense really well.

Uh oh, a storm is brewing. I remember what happens next, vaguely, and it's not going to be good.

That was a dark chapter. I like how you incorporate small bits of humor, though.

Another great chapter.

Ooooh, I could strangle Brek. This is so suspenseful.

I love the dialogue and the action in this story. Man, you are fantastic. Did you ever publish your original stuff?

Hmm, fragments are coming together in my mind. I don't want to type what I think is going to happen here because I don't want to spoil it for anyone. Anyway, great chapter!

Another good chapter! And, I'm on to the next.

That was a nice, light chapter. Poor Seifer. I surely couldn't stay awake for that long and still function.

Well, that was chilling. I don't remember exactly where the plot goes with this story, but I'm anxious to keep reading and jog my memory.