Although your story has no happy ending (I love happy endings) I still liked it :) Good work, although you should change the structure of the chapters. It's really hard to read.

Bravo! *Applauses* xDD I'm sorry if that was a little weird, I felt like you deserved it though =x Awesome story, even though the ending was sad. I like your style of writing, and I enjoyed this very much. Thank you for sharing this with us =) Well done! ^^

this was a great story. you had me hooked from the beginging. i knew that alexandr was short for alexadra. at first i liked frederick,but what i red his reaction i instintly hated him and he does 2 maids what her is engagerd to michiru. i was woundering when michiru would find out that alexandr was a girl. i'm glade that they shared 1 night of love before the final battle between brother and sister. that was sad though...why did you have to make michiru die? i wis fred had died and michiru lived.you mad me cry when michiru died. it is still a great story though.

Aww that was so sad the ending wa why she have to die? Well I guess its just a story great job!

quit the sarcasm monface! =_= 'cause despite some of the flaws JT seem to have it's a very pleasant story to read!

And THAT is a fact!!

Anyway I liked it very, very much. Although it has a very sad ending *sniffle*

part V

hmm... still needs improvement in the part of the ambush cant feel the intensity of the encounter...

too much explaining on the actions made... its like your reading a drama out from a radio sequal where in the characters need to explain to the audience that he/she will walk towards the door and open it and all because the audience needed to be informed but i dont know about in written dramas... no dialogues though

the horse slowly slowed down?? hmm redundancy and more grammatical errors!

too many unecessary thoughts in the part of the characters but if carried out correctly it may give strength to the story!

ahm? i dont get it... which is your narrator? 1st person or third person or something coz it seems the person telling the story seems to know everything going on... its having tendencies to be predictable or something

sowe...maybe because i havent read any novels or fanfics for so long it somehow disturbs my judgement?!?

hmp! nice how you related the quote " with money, we can do anything" with Michelles predicament... didnt expect that! heheh... good

hmm... how nice Marcus story(sighs...)

too common novel story in the part of Alexander...
again... are you really sure you havent read any novels at all?

yucks! isnt michelles clothes dirty? i mean with all the sweat and dust and all i mean she placed it on an open wound? ha! infectious hehehe

bad me..

to be continued...

part IV

brings so much fantasies in me! hehe... another "expect the unexpected moment" there

i like the way you give detail to every moment, the eyes, the scenery, even to the smallest details! they keep on feeding my imaginations keeping me in touch with the story as much as like i was really there...

i like the sense of loyalty and little betrayal but at the end a sense of honor and respect! maginoo pero medyo bastos??

admirring still the characteristics of Michelle :)

part I

"please... can you just left me where i am?" wrong grammar i think...hehe

are you really sure you havent read any pocket book /novels of this sort at all?

i like the way she teases Alexandr with sarcastic remarks... quite an admiring trait for a lady

hm i can sense lust hehehehhahaha
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part II

quite a twist i never expected! i thought Alexandr was her husband to be but nevertheless i like it when things dont turn out the way you imagined them to be... makes it more interesting...

funny name for the maid servant!~\ like mama cita or pacita good cook! hehehe

cruel parents tsk..tsk...

to Genesis

disclaimer:
neither do i own Sailormoon though in actions i depict such a character(assuming...)
sighs,

though the story is completely fictitious but if it comes from a pigment of our imagination to me its completely real if it exists in a world neither time and existence exists...

part I

hm... still in a stance keeping in mind that the setting is kinda like the highlands of Europe or something reminds me so much of novels written by Jude deveraux and the like but never the less quite an admiring setting!

i like the exchange of lines between the characters spontaneous and not monosyllabic! i can say Michelle to me is most likened to the characters in pocketbooks
(no offense to the author) as what i have mentioned earlier...

but i like the part when Alexandr first appeared to save the damsel in distress! brings out romantic fantasies within me and perhaps to other readers too

I love the story, but the ending... Its been used too much.

"--problems that burdened me a
lot."

I like the fanfic. I dislike the use of "a lot" there. Also, try to replace "that" with "which" as many times as possible. It sounds more "noble"
^.^

Well, at this point, WE readers should thank you for sharing this story with us...

It was sad yet so full of love and in a strange way there was also joy...

I did enjoyed reading your fic, Thank you again.

I still like your fic, I really do... although I hadn't read it all...

Well... I've read to chapter 7... I can't read for now Chapter 8 'cause site is experiencing overload... so I'll indeed come back later...