Great story, i enjoyed reading it, had hoped to see Ranma return to his home dimension to visit or something but stilll a great story to read

Over all not a bad fic, intersting story and nice blending of Ranma into another world. A lot of the humor is rather funny but like I said in my first review the writing style could use a little more work. More descriptions, more fluid conversations etc. Most of all less time skips, they are sort of useful to start off a fic but you should not use them so much threw out the entire story. Which is really to bad because the story and events themself are so intersting, real DnD type adventure for ranma and friends, just sumerized a little to much of the action.

I know there are still more chapters to read but I felt the need to comment on what I have read so far. Over all I love the story you are telling but I feel your writing style is it's greatest weakness. You seem to be stuck in the past tense to much often giving quick summeries of what has happend instead of describing events. Even major things like the Kai Monstary being attacked, was just glossed over. I also feel you sort of over used the 'time skip' feature in writing, skipping months, weeks, years with just the bare minium description of events that happend. Your portrayl of Ranma is not that kind either, it seems like in almost every combat situation so far he has done rather poorly. Stabbing his first undead in the chest, then turning his back on it without making sure it's really dead? On a mission of ultimate importance against the forces of evil and stops to check on a turned over wagon, in the middle of a cave filled with undead monsters? I also sort felt you over did it with making Ranma's journey difficult, or at least how you portrayed things. SO many set up traps for Ranma, despite the chaotic and random series of events of his traveling. I mean he gets ship wrecked, stumbles across a random carriage that happens to be carring a undercover agent of darkness? I suppose one my last complaints is, what ever happend to Ranma's black shirt he got from Ranko? It was a gift from a goddess, yet you made no real mention of him EVER wearing it, and from all acounts of the times he left places with almost nothing he shouldn't really have it. Pretty much same deal with the silver bow his father gave him, hardly ever touched it himself then gave it away to his brother. Like I said love the story but some the details are a little ilogical and the writing style sort of like a bland history book instead of an exciting novel.

This is Officially one of My Favorite Ranma Fics Ever.

Good so far...

Good so far...

Good so far...

Good so far...

Good so far...

Good so far...

Good so far...

Good so far...

Good so far...

Good so far...

Good so far...