Reviews for The Legend of Zelda: Reawakening of the Past

Reviews For: The Legend of Zelda: Reawakening of the Past

Veyrael Dominiri 2003-06-20 ch 4,	abuseOkay, this is an interesting idea. But one thing bothers me- I'm not really seeing much character development, aside from the last chapter. There needs to be some work there, but I think you've already figured that. Also, I cannot stress the fact that I'm not seeing enough detail and description here. Along with that, rather than having a Wolfos go 'ARO!', you should have just said 'the wolfos howled into the night'. That would have sounded better. If you put sound effects in like that, it makes your writing seem a bit immature. On other thing you could have done was rather than having an entire village/town instantly recognize Link, you should have surprised us a bit more with that. Keep that in mind if you decide to continue this. All in all, this was good. Please continue.
Jordiscy 2003-02-22 ch 4,	abuse::sweatdrop:: I didn't know that such ::cough cough:: was possible at age nine. But I like what you got! It's just been a while since i read anything veering toward this topic; I blushed a little, but I'll get over that soon. I can now empathize with Lance and see his internal conflict. ::sigh:: Lance . . . he's so cool . . . Jordiscy the Wood Elf
Jordiscy 2003-01-16 ch 3,	abuseI like what is happening. Very good plot development; it keeps me hooked. I see you take constructive criticism well. You deserve a cookie. Update soon. I hope you don't get too stresses with school. I can relate right now. High school senior with four AP (college level) courses can kill you. Tip: manage your time well, and coffee helps in the morning (don't drink coffee at night to finish homework; you'll never get to sleep then). Don't overload yourself with hard classes. Consturctive criticism time! Read over you fic several times before posting to make sure you get all spellling errors. Yes, i know they are easy to overlook, I've done it myself many times. You can also get others to proofread and edit, but that's what we're here for, isn't it?! I wish I had the time to highlight all spelling for you, but that is a tad more effort than I'm willing to spend on anything (I'm such a slacker... Maybe that's why I never seem to finish a fic...). You english teacher recognizes good talent. Keep writing. Jordiscy the Wood Elf
Snowsilver 2002-12-05 ch 2,	abuseWyverns! Neat!
Aetre 2002-11-02 ch 1,	abuseTip: how to get italics into the story: first, i reccomend saving the work as a web page (html format). second, italics will only appear when they are in the same word as non-italic characters. For example, if you write "Amazing," in italics, it won't show up that way on ffn.net. If you write "Amazing," and keep the comma in regular font while the "Amazing" part is in italics, then you should get the effect you're looking for. After you do this once, the entire remainder of the paragraph will be affected, so you need not do this a second time in the paragraph. And again, remember to submit it as a web page; there are so many errors associated with Microsoft Word format it's not funny--just one of which is the italics thing. good luck. if this doesn't work, i don't know what to say except to suggest that you try another submission format. --Aegel-maere Aetre--
Ganondorfthefieryred 2002-11-02 ch 1,	abuseGreat story! A few grammatical errors, but hey! I'm not sure about how to do the italics, but when he's thinking, put single quotes until you figure it out. Also, indent every time a new person speaks. For a 6th grader...WOW! I have never seen a 6th grader (I'm assuming you still are one) write so well since I was in sixth grade, and, well, that was me. In fact, I think I was about your writing level at that time: Thats a compliment, because I'm an A student in 8th Grade English Honors. And I am in a school with a seperate honors program (where all the honors students go to classes with brainy teachers). My english teacher LOVES me, and thats my favorite class. Also, anyone who knows me knows that I am a good writer with a great knowledge of the English Language. So, without further ado, I raise my hat and leave. clicks the Submit Review button Oh btw about Italics: Try putting [ i ]heres the italic text[ / i ](without the spaces) or heres the italic text (without the spaces)- the first one is the code for Italics that most forums use, and the second is the one that is programmed into HTML code. If they dont work, well, crap.
Thundermage 2002-11-01 ch 1,	abuseOk. As you know I'm the author of this fic and I'm writing a review to myself to ask the people who look at reviews(Like I do) this question: HOW DO YOU MAKE THE ITALICS APPEAR ON THE STORY! Please tell me. Thanks!
Snowsilver 2002-11-01 ch 1,	abuseHey! Not bad at all! My only suggestion is that you make a new paragraph everytime somebody new is speaking. Take a look at a fiction novel some time. A new paragraph starts whenever a new person speaks. It's good for story flow, and makes it easier for us (the readers, heh) to note when a new thought or person is being introduced. And it makes some of the HUGE paragraphs a bit smaller and less intimidating. A few grammar errors here and there, but I can live with that. Excellent, and keep writing, please!
Gemstone1 2002-10-31 ch 1,	abuse((^_^)) Wow! I really love this story! Keep it up! And just one thing, the last paragraph you had was ..... looooooong, -_- which makes it a little hard to read. N E ways, its good. oh yeah, please read my story if you get a chance. It's called Link meets Ruby( Rated R and romance.) Please update soon.
The Kirby Kid 2002-10-31 ch 1,	abuseHere's a tip that will help you a lot. Create a new paragraph every time a new person speaks. Example: DO NOT DO: Link turned to the mayor and said "Hi Mayor. What's going on?". The mayor looked to him and said, "Fine, nothing much.". DO: Link turned to the mayor and said, "Hi Mayor. What's going on?". The mayor looked to him and said, "Fine, nothing much.". Your writing will flow much better that way. Also seperate paragraphs when you feel like introducing a new train of thought...or if you want to get the readers attention with 'shock' or something. Remember, no one likes huge text blocks. I'm looking forward to more.

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