just finished reading, and I have to say holy shit! That story was so thrilling! I love how you painted Bartleby and Loki. They were a little bit more evil and everything but still very in-character (though I don't think they would ever rape a girl). I'm sad it's over, but I enjoyed every line of your story! keep on writing.
Kathrin

awesome!

at first I thought chapter 16 was a bit to much

But I liked how the metatron talked about the history of wizardry, it gave it the Dogma's touch

Good work with everything else

HILARIOUS! I LOVED it. The plot was nice, and you managed to hold on to some drama and structure while maiking it funny as HELL. I LOVED Rory, she reminds me of myself. I especially liked the whole Tolkien/Ozzy/Jane Austen thing at the end. By the way, am I right in thinking that mentioning Jane Austen is a Sense and Sensibility reference, or just a British reference? (It seems like most British actors pop up in Jane Austen book turned into movies, including my favorite!) Liked the Harry Potter reference at the end.

Cheers!

(BTW, I have a floppy disk with AR pics on it too. lol

Rory huh? Who is she based on Meg? lol all black, green/hazel eyes, dark brown hair, glasses... Hm... Who do I know that fits that description...Oh wait I know! Its Kelly isnt it? The hair gave it away. Lol Loveing the story and yes I am commenting on every one of your stories. Cath

The one thing that bugs me about so many Dogma fanfics is that they make the muse or angel characters SEXUAL. It is made clear in the movie that humans and ONLY humans are sexual.

Even though I liked the story and plot (it was well done and it was great you were able to finish it- most writers don't) Your Jay and Bob characterization was terrible.. sorry, but it was. While I was reading the story every time someone hit Jay and he said something stupid (more stupid than usual) and Bob just leaving without him, I was like "what the heck is this?" I guess they weren't big characters so it shouldn't matter, but maybe you should just flat leave them out of your next story because adding them to this one made the story suffer. They were out of character, which with them, is hard to do. Congrats.

i really liked this... i was just thinking the same story to myself, and since i was lazy, i decided to look for someone else who wrote it... and you did! huzzah!

tho it wasn't the same w/o jay swearing...

That was great! I really liked it!

I love this story, it's interesting and extremely funny.

This is great.

Thank God you don't listen to George Michael, or I'd have to stop reading immediately- Luckily, you have EXCELLENT music taste!

I love Serendipity's political veiws- Go You!

i liked the story, and it was pretty funny. however, i don't know if it was such a great idea to cross harry potter and dogma...they just don't seem to mix

Great so far. Just letting you know that the Indian language is written Hindi and pronounced Hin De basically. Hindu is the religion. Also, most Hindus don't worship just Shiva. He's only one part of the religion. Most are not psycho about people not being Hindu either. ) if ya want some creative Indian swear words, i can supply those as well quite well. Keep writing.