This story just keeps getting better! It always suprises me with something new and unexpected. I just can't get enough, I always just want to keep reading. It truly is an amazing story!
This story is simply put amazing! The detail and depth of everything is just so much more than I think I have ever read in any other story. The emotions are just so STRONG! The plot is obviously well thought out with so many pieces that fit together, but the pieces are so spread out you just have to keep reading to find where they go. I look very forward to the rest of the story!
Yay! I finally finished reading this one! And.. Such a great fic! Awesome! XDDDD
i've never seen fic with this great plot before, so when I read this, I even thought 'wow, its like I'm reading a best seller novel' srsly you really re a good writer! X3
yup, back to the review session (?)!
RikuSora are just too cute, so sweet! X'D I loved the lemon part! (thank god Riku was on top! XP) And I thought after they made love, there wouldnt be any serious problem again. But- argh. Riku was just TOO stupid in the next chapter! Poor Sora! :'( just one day, and his lover cheated on him. *S0B*
and at first I thought Yami was REALLY annoying and looked like Sai in Naruto. But- well, when it comes to the end, i'm starting to love him. X3 he's actually kind and.. When I saw the fanarts in your web, W0W he's handsome too! *A*
For his true identity... 0_o YOU REALLY ARE SUPRISING MEH! (wanna say more but I dont want to give spoileers!)
ahem, and and one of my other favorite scenes is, at Atlantica! Sure, I yelled when Riku did actually give his memories to that damn witch but- awww, when he confessed to Sora, that was just too cute! ;w; and even after he finally remembered, I hope they still can be more than bestfriends. :/ I'm not satisfied with their just-bestfriends relationship! Come ooonnnn gimme moaaaar fluff! *A* /shothard/
ahem. Aside from the main pairing, I also love the FF pairings X'D actually I looove the Seph-raped-Cloud scene more than the other sex scenes here muahahahaha pooor Cloudybear 8'DDDD /masamune flying/
the threesome was hot too L0L so they really were having 3some when Leon left Riku to 'checked' them L0L0L0L
gah, I wanna write moar! But.. -looks up- seems like I'm already writing too much 0_o
Anywaaaay Update plz! Dont abandon your baby and your fans heeere! X'* next chappie is Intermission rite? Lookin forward to it! Ganbatte!
I am really loving this story! You really have a way with detail and creating a strong image. I was on the edge of my seat during the fight between Leon and Cloud so far. I just can't wait to keep reading it's deffinatly one of the best stories I have read (and I have read ALOT!). Really well done!
I really really REALLY love your stories! This and compelete 180 are my favourites :)And I have to say that I made this account just couple minutes ago, and I have had SOO many things to say to you, but have not have the account for that.. So I guess I should write something to you.. But the thing is that, altough I have had a lot of stuff to say, I have forgotten about them. BUT the main thing is that I absolutely LOVE your stories! You are such an amazing writer..
And the only thing that I can remember right now is that in some of the early chapters you were talking about how Cid and Mushu had became really good friends.. So I went in to a shock, cos i thought you would start writing some cidxmushu yaoi :D Thank god you didn't!
OK, so I've actually read all of this - a friend emailed it to me YEARS ago to read. I cannot explain how amazing this is, or how much I NEED you to finish it so I can have some peace :P I know every writer wants concrit, but the only things I could say is that the plot can be a teensy bit hard to keep up with -but thats just me and not the story. You make me cry, and you make me think, and they're both good things ... one question?
Before Sephiroth leaves, he gives both Leon AND Cloud a kiss. Then Cloud teases Leon, and we find out about Ansem - and when Sephiroth returns, he's only interested in Cloud again. Just a teensy bit confused, 'cause I got the impression they'd "solved" it with a threesome (and I love those three, soo ...). Can you clear it up or is this plot I'm not meant to know yet?
Oh, btw, LOVE the Disney. I tend to watch it with some friends of mine, having come back from rock concerts and moshing. Becasue we're THAT hardcore :P And the fact that you've put 7 years of your life in just ... bowls me over. KEEP GOING - YOU ARE SO CLOSE. And if I die before you finish, I'm going to sue you in me will. :P
Holy crap this fic just keeps getting better and better! I am in sheer awe of this thing! You can't count me in as an obsessed fan _ So is it really that close to the end? There seem to be so many loose ends...Do you plan on making a sequel?
358/2 Days: Is there gonna be some giant spoilers coming up from that game because I totally haven't gotten around to playing it and probably won't for quite some time, but I don't want to be spoiled. I've been very careful to avoid them so far for it and Birth by Sleep. Just wondering. If there are, I'll have to put this off until I play it then. Sigh.
Sephy and Yami!: Yay, they're back! _
Yami/Ansem/Xehanort/Xemnas/Id Business: I'm really enjoying what's being brought up here. I mean, it's stuff we already know for the most part, but the theories about Ansem's Heartless and Yami's fake memories and how Xemnas has the real memories and Id and what he wants and ooh! It's a lot of info and contemplations from the characters, but I love it. I love that everything is started to get worked out.
Mickey: There he is! Yay.
Roxas/Namine/Xion?: I can only guess the third one they found is Xion. But I haven't played 358/2 Days, so I'm hoping it's someone I'm not expecting or a Riku nobody or something. Though I wonder how Namine came about here since Kairi was never separated from her body, just possessed. I can't wait for what's gonna happen with them. But with only a chapter left, how will they get the proper amount of time to be significant? Another wait and see...
Riku: Sigh. I don't want to say I'm disappointed with where he's gone, but I'm not too pleased. Don't get me wrong, I'm still excited for what might be in store for him, but I liked Riku as the hero here. Sora getting his time to shine too is great, but Riku's constant falls from grace are disheartening. It's like even though Sora took his hand in the beginning and Riku became the hero instead, none of it mattered. He was going to fall to darkness no matter what. Was that the whole point, I wonder? Even in the fan fiction world Riku can never truly become the hero? He's just not suited for it? Sigh. I've still enjoyed his journey, but I almost feel he got nothing to show for it. At least so far...
Sora: He got a trinity! Lol. I knew he wouldn't pick Cloud and Leon and when they didn't get picked my brain was like, "RE-JECTED! Sorry guys, thanks for playing..." They were great for Riku, but I couldn't really imagine them meshing with Sora's style long term. Donald and Goofy and Riku are the only ones I could see by his side really. Although, in the game I'm the first one to kick Goofy out for the world's party member most times. Lol.
Overall: I can't believe there's only one chapter left and then an epilogue. It can't be! As much as I've wanted this story to hurry along, I'm glad it's dragged on for so long. I'm sad it's coming to an end, but now everything will be revealed so I'm happy as well! Sigh. Your story really has the perfect balance of canon and creativity to turn in into something radically enjoyable. I love your other stories as well, especially AC180, but this is truly a masterpiece. C: I can't wait to reach the end with you. _ ...and was that a hint towards a sequel I saw in those end notes? *eyebrow raise* "One more chapter and a long epilogue to go, at least for this fic." Or am I reading too much into this? Lol.
Id: Epic battle! *hums the "13th Struggle"* I was so surprised when the princesses showed up! That was brilliant. I feel so unfinished because Id just ran away though. Lol. Ever since he stormed off from Sora in Atlantica I can't help, but think of him as a "petulant child" and that he pouts a lot when he doesn't get his way. Lol. But then again that kind of makes it hard to see him as a ginormous threat. Sometimes you surprise me though and feel rightly creeped by him. So good job!
Kairi: Okay, I take back what I said. You've portrayed Kairi much more differently than you had in the beginning. Was it lingering resentment for that "Let's take the raft and go" comment? Yes. Partially. She was just a little bitch before. But you've said that if you rewrote the first fourteen chapters it wouldn't be so bad, so I'm taking the present Kairi for what she is. She's written in a way that doesn't give her the "I'm-completely-helpless-and-a-huge-fucking-distraction-but-I-still-get-incredibly-smug-about-the-little-shitty-things-that-I-do" air that I get from her in the games. Lol. I actually can like your Kairi. Although, it really irks me (and kinda sickens me) to think that in all technicality Riku had sex with her. Even if she was asleep, Ansem was using HER body or her light. Gah, but where did that cock come from? O_o I don't want think about that.
Revelations: Alright! The Nobodies are coming into play! But for how long? There's only a couple chapters left... And finally! Cid straightened out what I already knew and was just waiting for someone to mention it again! Lol. Oh, and the princesses can make things a darkness repellent? Clever, clever...
Yami Issues: I miss him. Bring him back? Lol. That little bugger was awesome, even if he was confusing and mysterious. No, I LIKED that he was confusing and mysterious. It was his best quality. ... Aw, I didn't know I'd miss him until he was gone! Wah!
Riku: Cue "13th Struggle" again. So he's being overtaken by Ansem like in the game? Aw. I hope it's more than that. I like that he's getting new powers and everything and totally wearing his hot suit with the skirt from the game, but I was hoping he'd stick with the Keyblade till the end. Or at least get one of his own if there are multiple ones running around. I will wait and see. Oh, and his light is gone! Or smothered. Whatever. I feel bad for his tiny light...
Leon: He talked quite a bit in this one didn't he? Lol.
Mickey: Donald and Goofy do talk about him from time to time, so he has to be coming soon right? He's gotta help out the good fight. :)
Elaborations: Stuff I hope to hear more about.
-Why exactly Riku slept with Yami in the first place, although it may have been obvious or been said already, it doesn't feel tied up. The end feels loose. Maybe it's just me, but I felt something completely fishy about the whole affair. Riku's feelings now towards it are so extreme (rightly so), but the way he questioned himself about it stirred something up in me that made me feel like something was off. Please don't say hindsight bias! That he just feels that way because that was then and this is now. I need closure!
-The Gemini Project. Again, the end just feels loose and is a very interesting concept that you added to the story.
-Keyblade. I don't get how it could just leave Riku high and dry in certain times and come back like it never left in others. I understand that Riku's strength in his heart keeps fluctuating, but I don't understand why the Keyblade keeps coming back to him if Sora's heart is at a consistent strength. Just because he's not in the room doesn't mean Riku becomes the next in line since it can be called from anywhere. Sora's still on the plane of heartbodysoul, essentially a whole person, and has a strong heart. Really, Riku shouldn't be able to call it all unless his heart is stronger than Sora's and not hollow like it is now or Sora becomes incomplete and becomes separated in some way or his heart loses its strength as Riku's had. Even if Sora has grown throughout the adventure to overtake Riku, I still don't get why the Keyblade still comes to Riku when he calls for it, even if Sora isn't using it at the moment. The whole thing still kinda confuses me in the actual game so I'm trying to differentiate what elements you've added and what elements remain true to the game here. When I treat your elements completely separate I still feel confused. Lol.
-Kairi's Story. I like your Kairi, so I wanna hear more about her beginnings, I guess. But it's probably tied into Xemnas since he has Ansem's memories. Or at least that's what Riku and everyone else is thinking.
-Id. I just want more of him and his story.
OMG, this is insanely long! I'm sorry. :) Maybe some of my questions shall be answered in this next chapter! ... I always seem to have unwavering optimism for "the next chapter". Lol.
When Riku cried during his and Sora's (long-awaited) reunion. I. FUCKING. BAWLED! AH! I am not a crier. I am not one of those girls who watch chick flicks to have a good cry (I detest them greatly actually) or have their entire bookshelf stocked full of romance novels or the like to cry all over. Although, I cried all over Harry Potter, but let's be honest, who didn't break down at some point of the series? Nobody I know. Lol. The point is, I don't cry at every little thing, except when it comes to my own life. Lol. But when Riku cried, jeez, even BEFORE he started crying I was THERE! SALTWATER EVERYWHERE!
Gah. Enough of that.
Yami... Yami, Yami, Yami: Holy frick! I kinda knew who he was, but I wasn't getting WHY he was like that. Ah, revelations. They feel nice. Lol. It makes me sad that he's gone though...
Keyblade: Still a little confused here, but a lot of stuff was cleared up thankfully.
Kairi: Hey! There she is! Lol. No offense, but no matter how ANYONE writes her I think she comes off really smug. Hell, even in the game I thought that. Maybe it's the voice for her or something. She always comes off as the type to be revealing crap that she doesn't have a right to know. Maybe it's in her delivery. I don't know. Maybe it's just me. I don't WANT to hate her. I try really hard TO like her, but I DON'T know. She'll just do something that's annoying or rubs me the wrong way. Hmm. It's baffling to me really. Maybe because she's just so predictable and cheesy or so helpless about things... I'm rambling. I'll stop.
Overall: I'm really just speechless. That up there means nothing. Lol. I'm just shocked, and awed, and excited for the next part. We're really rearing towards the end here, eh? Sigh. It's been quite a ride, but it's not over yet. :)
Ah! Another one down! I wanna keep this quick since I still have a couple more chapters to read and I'm so excited. _
Dreams: Riku's nightmares are crazy, interesting, but crazy. I have no clue what the clear message is. Will they be explained more? I really hope so. They're extremely creepy. In a good way. Lol.
Sora's Adventure: I'm sad that it was so quick, but it was still entertaining and made me smile every time the story cut back to his part, even in the dangerous parts. :) It makes me wanna go pop in the movie right now. I loved that Sora figured out a way to see them when he got back to Destiny Islands, though I have to wonder how someone would activate the door from the child's side of the closet.
Keyblade: I have no clue what was going on there. Hopefully, that'll be explained in the upcoming parts. I don't know if your story held the concept of multiple keyblades (not forged) or not, but whether it did or didn't there was some odd reason that everything went weird. Concept 1. Multiple Keyblades - Sora received his own keyblade and Riku lost the ability to wield one temporarily, though coincidentally at a time that Sora needed one most and was most confident in his abilities while Riku was doubting his own. Concept 2. One Keyblade (Or one of this type at least) - Sora received Riku's keyblade while Riku's heart was weak and unable to wield it. Sora then needed it to seal the world, even though Riku was in danger without it and could not take it back until the stronger heart was finished with it. Contemplation - Concept 1 explains why Sora's keyblade was Oathkeeper and not Oblivion, though it really doesn't explain why Riku wasn't able to call his to him then since either way he was the strongest heart associated with that particular keyblade... Right? One keyblade makes more sense, but why would Sora's strength of heart fluctuate to the extreme like that and then recede enough for Riku to remain keyblade master. His desire to save a world shouldn't have an impact on that, right? Maybe since he was a kid, his heart was brighter and stronger? Then I think I remember Yami talking about more than one keyblade (other than the forged ones). Argh! This is confusing. There better be some explanations on the way. X_X
YAMI!: I don't know what's with this guy! He's gone completely soft on me. No more mysterious smirks or smiles. No more riddles. No more calm coolness. He's totally deflated. What's happened to him? He actually helps Riku, answers questions, gives straight advice to Sora, fully defies Maleficent, has his light go crazy, and loses his will to fight. Oh, Yami. Sigh. I can only wait for answers. v_v
Overall: Great. Of course it is. Lol. As confusing as the whole thing is, I'm loving it.
My, my, my. It's been awhile, huh? Starting college has eaten up my time for months and only recently I've gotten back to your story. I had to re-re-read EVERYTHING! Lol. It's quite a bit and I've missed a lot still, but I shall continue! I'm so excited to get back into this and so close to the end. :)
Riku and the World: So, Atlantis. Okay. I've never seen the movie, but from the way you describe things and paint pictures I feel I don't need to. For a world I'm hardly familiar with I'm finding it easy to imagine and walk Riku through it so points for that! I, of course, don't know how well you're keeping to the characters either, but I'm enjoying them and relating to them as if I do. You have a very nice talent for keeping things well-tuned to the originals without turning them into something else, so everything is probably just as it's written here. And if the way Atlantica was handled is any indication of how this will be, then I'm in for something incredibly awesome and exciting. Riku's still memory-less and lost and unhappy without Sora in here, but hopefully that will change soon. Oh, and fighting naked had to suck. Lol.
Sora and his Predicament: I was so happy to see Monster's, Inc. put here! It's certainly an interesting world to use in this setting. And making Sora a five-year old? Brilliant! You captured Mike and Sully here masterfully. The dialogue is very on point with them. I love this movie and I can see some potential for fun and comic relief here if Sora's bathroom time was a peek into what's ahead. Lol. Great tie-in with Randall and Hollow Bastion's heartless machine as well. I can't wait to see how it plays out.
Yami: That asshole. Lol. I really want to hate him, but then I'm back to loving him two sentences later. What can I do? I'm very on the fence. I think my feelings toward him are more of a reflection of Sora's feelings for him. I hate him for what he's done to both Riku and Sora, but then he redeems himself and makes you wanna trust him, but then the second I'm almost there he decides to do something sneaky again... It's a cycle. I can only watch his part play out and hope for the best. *sigh* It's like the Severus Snape dilemma all over again. Lol.
Maleficent: I don't know why she gets her own discussion section since she wasn't even in this chapter, but I'm really sick of her. Lol. I want her to be defeated already. Every time she comes along I'm like: "Oh! One day... Riku's gonna stick his Keyblade right where the deepest darkness resides. Or Sora even! That'd be even better..." I can't wait till she gets her comeuppance!
Kairi: Heh. I just thought, "Where is she anyway?" I don't really care, but what a mystery. Lol.
Overall: Winner! Again, I have more questions than answers here, but hopefully they will be resolved in the next couple chapters. You have no idea how happy I am to be back into this and getting into the chapters I've missed. I hope you're doing well and writing is coming easily for you. :)
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