First off, they alow songfics now (obviously) so go ahead and add the lyrics back. Go ahead it won't hurt. It's nothing, just post the lyrics. Seriously, post the freaking lyrics. Joking. Anyways, this is a good fic, my only problem is that Juliet and Holly seemed a bit out of character and this was before TTP so I don't even know where the heck you got the idea of Holly+Artemis. Not to mention she's 80 and he's...was it 13 when this book came out? Hm...
Anyway, besides my pet peeve of the unreasonable A/H relationship this was a good fic. You seem to be the first person in the archive who's playing with the idea of Artemis dieing.

_Weirdo

oh lord, I'm crying eyes out!
and I haven't cried in 3 years now
beautiful but so sad

I didn't think it was very slashy, which disappoints me mildly, but it was still awesome, which makes me happy =). Though, I doubt you care. Still: This is really well-thought out, really creative and altogether great.

interesting twist at the end of the story! Having Holly and Juliet thinking that they both love Artemis, but in the end not realising that their soulmates could be each other! And Artemis dies! Feels tempted to do hurray dance.

How did Arty get hurt? i'm confused.

It's just friendship between the two woman..Right ?
I liked this fic..But why did you KILL ARTEMIS ??!!`´

So...sad.. (Sobs) Excellent job!

i'll go for the friendsip thing as slash seriously scares me, and i wasn't scared. Nice one kitty, you comin on the forums anytime soon?

Why is it that most of your fics leave me depressed and hollow inside? I know that sounds bad, but its a good thing. It means you're good at writting angst!

This was so sad. Made me feel like lying on my bed and thinking for a few hours.

Oh well. Great writing.

Okay Holly/Juliet creeps me out. Can you word it so that it is only meaning friendship?*shudders*

NO! Artemis died! Great story!

*cries a bit*
That's so sad...

*smiles*
It's good though, very...

$DETERMINEDPerfectionist$

Hey, this was not bad! I didn't mind Artemis dying, I like sad, sad, stuff. And both Juliet and Holly liking him and having that discussion was pretty well written. I think though, by reading the third in the Artemis Fowl series, that there is a love triangle like this- Holly/Artemis/Juliet. Butler states that he thinks Artemis is rather fond of Juliet in the third book, so that just led me to believe that triangle. And Butler _is_ pretty perceptive, and usually right.. Who knows?

Way good, loved it... keep going...

Good job. The ending was sad- I hadn't expected that! You might want to work on your opening paragraph however- the first sentence didn't really *grab* me or pull me into the story. And I was a little confused with Butler and Artemis, because I thought that Artemis had a broken arm and then Holly and Juliet were acting very sad and hopeless.

Other then that I thought it was a rather good story. The reactions of Holly and Juliet were very realistic. The dialogue could have used a little work, but other then that- good job!