This story does suck. First off, Artemis is not so weak that he dies from a freakin BROKEN ARM! Second off, Juliet probably would hate Holly because of the mesmer thing in the 1st story. I'm not going to bitch

anymore because it's a waste of my time. READ MY STORY! IT'S COOL!

If the BFW (big friendly walrus) saw this, you would be in parody city. Big Friewndly Walrus is very good at finding mistakes. I hope he makes fun of your story because you DESERVE IT! SOMEONE STOLE MY SNAPPLE! :O

A beautifuly written story. i would love to see another chapter, perhaps your story could be something like the end at the beginning. work from what you have created to elaborate on how Artemis got in the hospital and how he already knows that Holly loves him. just some ideas because i would love to see a couple of more chapters.

He he he he eh ehe he he he eh eh ehe eh eh ! You posted some more of your stuff! You know you would have been really, really safe if you just hadn't mentioned anything - or included the last line. For anyone who was reading it properly would have been able to see the subtleties that you put in nad for everyone else they can just see 'friends' and write it off.

I like the way your writing flows so that it doesn't feel the same as other fics that introduce love in 1000 words because you have treated it differently. You haven't tried to tackle the 'now' aspect of it and in reflection you can just wonder what had happened in the past to get them to this point, without feeling wronged that it happened without explaination anyway. You do that a lot in your fics. It's a different way to look at writing and it is very effective, easier and *better*! (if only other people would realise this.)

I'm going to go for a swim now...

Yeti

omg...nooooooooooooooo...my arty died! noooooooooooooooo...omg...I'm gonna cry!

Hmmm... so was it slash? Or not? I dunno.. either way, great story. You don't see many that just focus on the girls like this.

That was some twist! I'm actually pretty adverse to the idea of homosexuality since I come from a pretty traditional society, but I'm not going to let my prejudiced perceptions get in the way of reviewing.

It's actually nice to see the Artemis Fowl section opening up, even though you're probably going to get a lot of flames for introducing homosexuality in here. :) You've used a fairly extensive range of vocabulary which didn't overwhelm the story, but added just the right amount of flavour to it. But you should have made this fic longer and elaborated on the characters because the ending seems too abrupt. In fact, I had no idea this was actually a Holly/Juliet thing until you talked about it in the Author's Note. More details could be added so that the reader would be drawn into the story more. Presently, your fic doesn't have enough depth yet. I believe the first slash fic in the Artemis Fowl section is actually by Blue Yeti, and I also read that by accident :) It's a brilliant in-depth fic though, even if it is slash. Maybe you can pick up some pointers from her story.

Keep writing!