That, that was wonderful. Nice use of imagery.

Hi, I liked this story. However, there was a time when you repeated a word twice in a very short space of time, Ulraunt and his 'revulsion', I think. I think you write very well, and while the words of his tutor were very good, I think you should reduce the number of them. A few good ones add depth, too many distract from the action. Apart from that, this story has to be one of the best I have read ina long while, keep it up, I want to read the next chapter if there is one.