Gee - great story, really! Go on writing!

AAAAAAAWWWWWWWWWWWW! That was so saaaaaaaadddddd! There's got to be a sequel, there just HAS to be a sequel! PlEEEEAAAAAAASSSSSSSEEEEEEEEE!!!!!!! I repeat: PPPPPPPPPLLLLLLLLLLLLLLLEEEEEEEEEEEEEEEEEAAAAAAAAAAAAAAASSSSSSSSSEEEEEEEEEEEEEE!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!

Nice. You need to have somebody edit the grammar/spelling/puntuation mistakes, but the story has real potential. The suspenseful end leaves you waiting for the next part, but also might leave you confused. It could be a really good fic.