Morbane 2002-11-10 . chapter 1No need to be self-deprecating, I don't think there's anything wrong with this chapter except that I feel kind of also-ran-ish because I just invented a poison Eon called 'Miasmeon'. You won't say I've plagiarised, will you? *groan*.
Anyway, the radio idea was original. I wasn't so sure about the high-school diploma stakes - that seemed a little predictable - but that's really the only thing I didn't like. Neat story which has me hoping to read more. Good suspense, plot, etc. :) |