nice stori. email me wen u have more chapters. u mite think bout changing that part in chapter two where the private is talking to the captain about the outline of her plan. she says sir waaaay too much. and um... just so you know u made her say sir twice in a sentence. it sounds very wrong. but other than that its a great stori.
this story is really interesting..i dont really like the part about yue and sakura.. but thats how some people are.. ( which i dunno why) but im not tryin to flame no worries! i just wanna see what happens next so add more as soon as you can!!!
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