not interesting enough

**stares at the screen in total speechlessness**...**slaps self** Incredible!! I'm a huge BW fan and I really think you did it justice from Heathers POV!!

Nice take on Heather's POV, although in the movie, Heather had been following Mike all through the house, she was upstairs with him, then as he ran downstairs, she took a while to follow...but overall a good piece of work.

umm yeah your going to update right? because i want to see what happens verry badly!!! ok? so please write more soon or i'll die

Pretty good. Nice use of descriptions. But maybe try splitting up the writing into paragraphs, it sounded like more than one to me. Nice job though

-Jessie