Alright then. I know I'm about five years behind on this craze that is Blair witch, but had I watched the movie when I was eleven... well I would have never gone camping agian. Anyway. Really good story. I like the creativity. Keep up the good writing.

Whoo! Spook-ay spook-ay! Glad I'm reading this during the day and not at night! Very good! I like you!

Will there be another chapter? The fic is marvellous.

Holy crap!!That's just plain awsome.You gotta
think of a career as a horror novilist or a screan writer for a horror flick!MAN!You gotta keep up the good work!Oh well Adios amigos!
P.S No I'm not Spanish or Mexican In fact I'm
Sikh.I just felt like saying good bye diffrently
Later!

One word: wow.

Very good. Just lose the last paragraph, it makes the story a little too clichéd. Look: You want to be a little more abrupt, that's all. Here's one more suggestion: Lose the "She never spoke again". It's not really a good line. You should finish the story at the point where she tries to... er... "hug" the guy. Up to then, it was excellent. After that it became mediocre, and when it comes to horror literature you want a snappy, chilling finish.

That gave me the shivers...

Brrr... Scary!

This story is really good. When I read the part about the little girl cutting her hands, I got really freaked out. If the second chapter is as good as this, it's going to turn out to be a REALLY good story. Please hurry up and post the second chapter.

This was kind of dissapointing, I wish you wouldent waste your talent on ** like this

You certainly know how to build tension!
I doubt if sisters can be 'wired' as you wrote, but besides that little error I liked it a lot.

Good work!