Not bad! Not bad at all my friend!I really like the descriptions! But as you did with chapta 4, make sure you have it evenly spaced and not like 5 or 6 enters for spaces. That gets quite annoying and sloppy.

Otherwise, GREAT, GREAT read. Can't wait to see what else you have planned!

http://w.fanfiction.net/s/2029531/1/

This is really cool, a story based on a part much later in the game, and a well thought out one at that. Usually such sories would chronicle the beginning of the game, and the author wouldn't finish to get this far. It kept me glued to the screen, to see how the gruop would find out all they need to know in order to go between Virtual Expel and Energy Nede. Good work, hope to see more chapters soon!

Ha-ha. I remember I freaked out when I first did this in the game. Hehe!

Soo... they're going to go to Fun City? *giggle* I'm working on beating the Cave of Trials now... hehehehe! I can't wait, hurry up and write the next chapter!

*gasp* oh, weird! (I never did that part of the game....) Very cool! I really like it! I hope you continue this story! (but I also hope you continue "Before You Fly", too) Good work and keep writing!

Crap, now you got me sayin ne. NENENENENENENENEE!!!!!

NEXT CHAPTER NOW, HEAR ME?!!!!! NOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOWWWWWWW!!!!!!!

Yes, I've gone psycho.