You should seek professinal help.

Ok, first, let me say that you could be a good parody writer. The fic made fun of fics. If the story was revolving around mocking fics, then it coulda been good. but it took itself too seriously until the end.
Everything is waay too outta character. The V-man has no qualms about killing Big Jake, he tried that, remember? He woulda, too, if that Hork-Bajir hadnt been there.
And I'm sorry, but Big Jake wanted to kill his own brother for the war, do you really think he would love the thing that destroyed his family, his hometown, and his life, childhood, and happiness? Big Jake is too serious to start going, "oh behave, baby!"
and in thought-speak, it goes like , not like >this>.
"Cassie fell in love with the bear that was Rachel's battle morph."
You'd think she'd be pining for Jake or something.
"Rachel fell in love with Voldemort from the Harry Potter books."
Are you honestly trying to tell me that Rachel, THE Rachel, OUR Rachel, would fall in love with someone with such horrible fashion sense?
"Ax fell in love with the liquid in the yeerk pool."
Random. Kinda funny.
"Tobias fell in love with a grease stain that was kinda shaped like Abraham Lincoln's head."
that was so mind-bogglingly random that it was hilarious. But out of nowhere. I wonder what Zazu thinks of this, he's liked Tobias for AGES.
"Erek fell in love with a DVD player,..."
Ok, that's a really really good one. but nothing can make up for...
"...and Marco fell in love with Visser 1, and everyone said "EW" (think about it)."
You. Are. Disgusting.
"Finally, the Ellimist and Crayak admitted that their fighting all sprang from romantic and sexual tension."
you know the Ellimist has no known body and Crayak is part machine, right?
all in all, There were only two good parts- Ax and Tobias.
This fic is psychotic.
And yes, this could be considered a flame, but notice that i was honest, logical, and reasonable, pointing out errors and explaining the fault in them, instead of incoherently screaming that omg this is liek so stoopid and u liek omg need liek 2 go 2 a liek mental hopsital ur so stoopid!11 so it's not a bad flame, per say. i just think you should stop taking the green pills and come back to us.
i may just have nightmares about this. when i think of something, my brain forms vivid, high-resolution, 3-d, moving, surround-sound mental images of it. Now i'll be thinking of the Abomination Ship, V-man/Big Jake. *shudder*

OMG, so funny. I was laughing all the way through this. Great parody.

While normally I wouldn't review such a short and random story, I must confess I was laughing hystercally at this. You have some genuinely funny concepts, and I must confess I'd like to see the ones listed out in the last paragraph written out in their own fanfic. Congratulations. That was the first fanfic that made me laugh for a long time.

THAT SUCKED! THAT WAS THE STUPIDEST THING I'VE EVER READ! YOU NEED SOME MENTAL HELP!

WHAT THE HELL??!

are you sane. eeewwwwwwwwwwwwwwwww

Thanks allot. Now I'll have nightmares for three weeks.

That was sorta freaky. But cool enough. Except the part about Tobias falling in love with a grease stain, that hurt.
My man woud not fall in love with a grease stain, thank you. He loves me. Not even Rachel.


Me!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!
Sorry.

oh my god thats hillarious!

okay..... that was.... unique.
Funny though, lol.

i wanted to read animorphs not garbage try a real plot

this story sucks **. It's not even funny.

**sweatdrops** Well, okay, slash fics can be ridiculous...but...this is gonna give me nightmares. @_@
It's a good parody, though.