Overall I liked it. I felt some of the dialogue towards the end was hard to read simply because I wasn't too sure who was speaking. Perhaps using some character indicator instead of doing it with the font. The ending was unexpected and I like the philosophy behind Ash's evolving and while I don't normally like stories where Ash turns into a pokemon I felt that this was done with taste. I also like that you allow him to use transform to return to his own human form. I also felt that the last chapter gave a lot of information quickly, but that might just be me.

just wanted to say thanks for not trying to build Mewtwo's character much. I've read to many fanfics where they keep practicaly making him human. The one even had him as a mad scientist practicaly! Ugh, Well great story.

Wow, D! You never told me that you wrote such a great fic a long time ago. Oh wait... you did! _;;; Anyway, I really liked this.

Too bad Giovanni didn’t die. I suppose Ash wasn’t hungry enough to eat him. LOL jez teasing you P

Seriously though, why can’t Ash be more like this in OH? I guess I’ll find out in MMW or One. Great job! )

Gosh... I found myself chuckling all over the place from Chapter 31 _;;

“We have - - the -!” Meowth said.”

Nani? o_0;;

(a few lines later) oh I get it now. I thought they were swearing. LOL. Well, they could be P

:d Gosh... when was the last time I ate peanut butter straight from the jar? o_0;; Well... it feels right. I know I’m going to regret it later, though. Maybe I should at least go get a spoon or something... NAH! :P

“…Did he really…put…something…in…you?”

Now I understand why those “...” are important. That sentence needed as many breaks as it can get. -_- I’m not making fun of you btw. Jez teasing )

Btw Billie is starting to grow on me. That’s so sweet of her.

Anyway... um... I just ran out of cookies to dip into my jar of peanut butter. I’m still hungry but I don’t want to leave my PC. I wanna keep reading. But I’m still hungry. *looks around* *sees cat* *looks for a rock* o_0;; @_@;; _!

The song “Disease” just popped in my head after I read this sentence. Anyway, they should leave Ash alone. A like him better infected... er... not like that _

Wow... a virus that’s smarter than Ash... the wonders never cease _;;

“…or how many Pokémon I had ended up killing…” How old were you again when you write this? o_0;; Tell me it was just a phase.

“I could see the bones in my arms…broken…and covered with red blood…My shirt…was destroyed…revealing…more blood…flowing…downwards…dripping…”

Noooo! My dainty innocent eyes! _

“I did eat the Meowth.”

_!_!

“Wait!” He said that to the tent? Wow... what does he think it is? A waiter? _;; -_- ok ok. That’s just as bad. P

I never wanted to kill anything. I preferred to capture Pokémon in Pokéballs and train them. I had never thought about killing one myself and then eating it… @_@;;

Its eyes were open. They stared straight ahead, unblinking. Its body was completely still. Blood was flowing from a large wound just behind its left ear. It stained its fur and trickled down its side. The rock that I had thrown lay nearby. It was halfway coated with dark red blood. 0_0;;

I like Taper. What does it look like? _;;

Wow... I didn’t know you could fax them... oh wait. I did! I recall you trying to do something like that during one of our rps.

“there’s some other girl following you around…It just seems that a lot of weird things have been happening to you…I’m worried about you, Ash…”

A girl following Ash is weird. *snickers* _;;

I... um... I have no idea what just took place there. Well, I know that it was a battle but... you know _;; At least, I know that Ash won.