This is really good! I wonder how the stone will set him free and will it truly end all of his nightmares... Is there more to this story? Great job..Love to hear more...

A very good story.I'd like to read more

I read this story ages ago on the Barrow downs site and loved it then- re-reading it and the last chapter which I hadn’t read yet has made me love it even more. This is amazingly incredibly good and I sincerely hope there’s more to come. I love the way you have represented the “inner Pippin” in this. You portray all the characters with depth and accuracy…. I loved the relationship shown between Frodo and Pippin in particular, and also you’re description of Aragorn. And the avalanche metaphor (I can just see Pippin as a pebble). I don’t think Pippin is OOC at all, I think you ave portayed the true Pippin more faithfully than any other fanfiction I have ever read- excepting possibly the work of Baylor, another great Hobbit writer. By the bye did you know you’re story has been re-posted on the Barrow Downs site? It has been returned after it was removed by an over site… so if you want to update on that site.. hint hint…. Any way this is a very long review and it’s high time for me to shut up .. I hope to see more of your work on this site soon…

Good, but needs another chapter.

So, is there ever going to be another chapter? It doesn't seem quite complete as it is but maybe that's just me. Anyway, write more stories!

Alright, I've been meaning to review you for a long time, but I had to get an account first and then I...kind of..forgot about you. Hehe. Sorry bout that. But I'm finally here to tell you how fabulous your fic is. One of a kind, with an excellent plot. The right amount of humor and angst combined to make a great story. I realize that you quit work on this several months ago, but I was wondering if it's actually finished. If it is not, I would love to see more. You are an excellent writer. Keep it up!
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Finally, I got a chance to read and review.

Ok, you've got, I think, a good grasp on how the characters are interacting with each other, and you successfully weave a number of little incidents into the text in a good way--I liked your interpretation of Pippin's questioning of Gandalf during (well, just prior to) the siege of Minas Tirith.

Some minor difficulties here and there, still. The following looks like an instance of parallel construction gone awry:

"There is a large mound now somewhere south of Bree, soaked with orc blood and burning with the fires that they set to their corpses. Some escaped, but not without injury and not without the leadership they needed to set themselves against the elves of Imladris."

As I understand it, what you want to say is "Some escaped but not without injury and not with the leadership they needed to set themselves against the elves of Imladris."

Then again, in chapter 5, the opening two plain font paragraphs need to be in the pluperfect: Pippin *had* never ceased to think of the dream; It *had* been good to see Merry again, but now... etc.

I still think the first chapter's closing lines need something. We need to see how Merry's decisiveness in leaving his post in Rohan contrasts with Pippin's 'accidental' leaving of his post(s) (being dragged to Minas Tirith, having endangered the Fellowship in Moria, having looked into a palantír). I think you can do this relatively painlessly, and it would deepen the interaction that the two have later.

I await the final chapter. Keep on writing!

Oh, genius! The style is so similar to Tolkien's! It's fantastic! I worship you for the brilliance! It keeps to the storyline, the characters are almost perfectly portrayed and it was fun to read. Damn there not being another chapter after this one! ^_^;;;

Now, hurry up and write more! XD

Very intrigueing, very evocative. I am really enjoying this story. I like your writing style and I think your plot is well thought out. I certainly respect the way that you have included textual cannon quotes and references.....you grasped the subtleties of JRRT and it shows.

I tried to read this, as Dwimordene reccommended it. But it seems to be out of order. I started with your Note to Readers, but as I moved through chapters, the chapter dropdown list changed. The titles didn't match up. The second page I accessed was Destiny Calls. Moving on, I read Left Hanging. But then when I clicked to move to the next chapter, I got Left Hanging again. Next is Ghost Dreams, though the label says Healing Hands. So I'm left to think the first chapter got put at the end. The second is in place, as well as the third, but the fourth and final (Healing Hands) is missing because it's a duplicate of the third.

What I've read so far has been good. I can hear Pippin and Merry's voices in it. Though I'm wondering where Legolas is all this time. You have everyone else of the Fellowship. And I'm curious to read how it ends. Let me know when you get the story straightened out, please, and I'll come back and read it in order.