Very nice, id kinda rather read something with vaughn and sydney on a mison toghter though, but i thought u did capture vaughns character very well. More action though please. :)

On your P.S. I did think that was funny and it has become my friends and I's quote of the week, or two weeks rather. I LOVE THIS STORY!!!! I think you did a good job doing Vaughn's POV. It makes me think he's not as stupid as the ep made him out to be, and that's a relief. Please write more!!!!

i luaged, and did you catch the foreshadowing when she said he's be doing wind sprints ina few days... why couldn't he have wind sprtinted after her... huh huh huh?? stupid. s/v 4 ever. but great story, it really was how vaughn would feel.
keep writing. im such a sap.lol anyways

You did an absolutely fantastic job on this story! Congratulations on having the nerve to write your first one. It is very well written and I enjoyed it tremendously. Lots of times people write easy fix endings (kiss and imagine all the problems are solved) but you kept the conflict alive and fleshed it out more. Keep writing!

I haven't posted feedback before but I have to say that I think you have totally nailed Vaughn's feelings regarding the whole Syd/Alice situation.
Great Job!

YES i did laugh!!! i was like uhhhhhhh right then kendall. you just keep on thinking that . . .

a word on ur fic though. nice stuff you have here. but when people think, they don't really analyze themselves like vaughn does. like the passage where he's like 'i wanted to rebel for a brief time'
people don't really . . . think like that. i dunno maybe psychologists do, but ordinary people generally are a little less withdrawn from their own life - they can't realize stuff like that.
kay. i like it though!
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I really loved it! I like how you stayed in his head, that way he didn't have to make excuses for what he thought. I also like your writing style. Thank you!

i like, i like!! i love the overly angsty vaughn! I just want to give him a hug! This was really good! keep writing

Wonderful look into Vaughn's mind about Counteragent. Makes me feel much better after talking to some people who are convinced that he's now the biggest jerk in the world because of Alice. Good job.

Nice. Liked the fact that Vaughn feels he has to justify being with Alice even though Sydney was with Noah and hangs around Will all the time. I really enjoyed the line about Vaughn revering his father in life and death. It was something that I could completely see Vaughn saying or thinking. I also liked the part about Vaughn having structured his life around the rules. Very Vaughn-like.

Good work.