This is excellent. Thanks to Cam for the recommendation!

What a deep, engaging, wonderfully composed ficlet! Grissom sure has a problem with people - anyone, even Sara - getting too close to him, doesn't he?

LOVED THIS:

"The road, like a lullaby. The air, thick and heavy like the center of hell.
The scenery, bland and monochromatic. No cows, no country, no work crews,
no rest. Peaceful, this going-home journey, this company, this state. Everything
he wanted."

The air was thick and heavy like hell? Me thinks Griss went a little far with the admissions, and now has that heavy, nervous feeling that always arises whenever you expose yourself to another - personal admission-wise - too much.

The part about monotony, cows...about the patterns - the rituals and routines he wants to preserve. What he likes to count on - fixedness...

But if a "you did" gets a dumbfounded expression out of Sara, what will a "Good" (the ending line) get?? Sara is going to by muy confused!! Captivated by that line...

LOVED YOUR STORY. GREAT JOB! Very descriptive and fun to read!

*Saryn*

Awwww. Lovely. Would love to see a pre-quel (hint, hint) with the actual beach conversation (or lack of conversation)? Great imagery and really excellent dialogue (as per usual from you). Keep writing!!!!

Oh, wonderful... The mood, the descriptions, the hints of G/S... I love themed stories, and this was definitely so. Lovely. Very lovely.

Wow, that was really excellent. I love the line about his words being "trapped in the car." What a poetic way to put it. I'll be re-reading this again quite often.

What a beautiful story.In-character all the way through, wonderful. just...lovely.

Blaze, it's good to read you again! Nice visuals in this story. Strange conversation, but interesting!

Yay! Another story by Blaze. I don't know where you were planning to head with this story, but I'm so glad you took it where it went.

Ah, very lovely piece. It flows beautifully, and the balance of scene description, dialogue and inner thoughts really works. I could really see it all in my mind's eye. I like the way you hinted at the depths between the two, giving just enough detail to make it "real." Wonderful job!

Nooo! It's over? But I don't want it to be over...I was so enjoying it,especially the spoilery part. I need more! I need another one of Blaze's wonderful RST stories. Pleeeeeeease?

I really liked this story - a little glimpse into a rare peaceful moment between the Geeks. Impassive!Grissom. Sleepy!Sidle. Opening up just a little to each - just enough to puzzle. Great job.