Great story, lots of 'WHAT THE HELL IS GOING ON' parts, but definately good.
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That was pretty good. The last few chapters were a little much in detail, though not so much that I couldn't read it. You are a great writer. I'd really like to see this story continued, though I know that if you continued all your good storys' you'd have no time to do anythig else. I look foward to reading more of your work!

Aha! I knew they'd fall in love! But alas *gasp* it is left off! *sniff* You must write more to this story! I'd like to know more about Aubria! She's fascinating. And what will happen when the others find out about the four of them. Twin souls means much more than just sharing characteristics... Body ,heart, AND soul! Nice fic, I look forward to seeing more! Bai!

Whoa! I had a feeling something like this might happen. That's gotta be tough for both of them. It's like they belong together, but Vegeta has already pledged himself to another. *sniff* Tragically sad! There's only one more chapter? EEp! Is it unfinished?! I'm gonna go check it out!

Very nice! I really enjoyed this chapter and especially the part where they were talking to Aubria and about how she had one more larval stage to go and then Chi-chi made her feel better. Aw...cute scene with Mara and Piccolo! Hehehehehe...*thinks of the song 'So happy together'* She got him to smile, *gasp* :)

Only three more chapters? Is this finished? I HOPE SO! *grin* Ja ne!

Whoa...that prophecy gives me chills every time I read it. Awesomeness to the max, man! (Ok, that sounded really 80s) I'm enjoying this story very much! The books you based it on sound pretty cool too. I think Aubria's going to be the most important person in the story, besides Toshi. I guess they'll teach her to fight. And then comes Piccolo! I wanna see what he's up to.

"What's a T.V.?" LOL! Poor kid, her planet musta been really primative. Cool visuals with that forehead touching thing!

Dude, I loved that ending line. So mysterious! It must mean that Aubria truly is the prophecy child. Perhaps one with no twin soul. I thought she had met her earlier though...hmm. I think you did fine with the ages of the boys. At this point Gohan would be like 25 or so and Goten like 17 being that he's seven years younger than Gohan. Sweet!

Lots of screaming this chapter, I felt bad for poor Aubria. Thank goodness they stopped yelling though. That was really sweet of Vegeta to say all those things about Toshi, although it only ticked Bulma off, hehe! I'll be back for more! Ja ne!

Nice! Good chapter! I really like your writing style, it takes the reader and draws them into a situation. I don't really feel like just an onlooker, but at the same time I feel like I'm apart of this story.

Ah, Aubria, I like her name and I'm glad the Son family took her in, very sweet! I LOVED the prophecy rhyme, BRILLIANT! Then that flashback while Bulma and Toshi were shopping, very cool! I gotta read more!

Kawaii! A new kid, she sounded adorable but I felt really bad about her parents and home family. I'm really looking forward to finding out more about her and the prophecy thing she was talking about. Ah, that scene with Bulma, Bra, and Chi-chi was just priceless! I could imagine it happening. I'd be really jealous too if my husband just out of the blue brought somebody home like that! I wonder how differnetly Bulma would feel about it if Vegeta's twin were a guy. Funny thought!

Great chapter, I really enjoyed it! Toshi's next, yay! Be back later, Ja ne!

Another excellent chapter! That was really kawaii, and Mara's right... I don't think Piccolo has ever once slept! Poor guy, if I were him I'd be tired out of my mind! But at least meditation is relaxing, perhaps that's why he does so much of it.

OMG a new power! And it was like it was invisible! Fight Fight Fight! Of course that would happen in the DBZ world, hehe! I'll be back later! Ja ne!

LOL I so laughed when Bulma said "That can be arranged..." But now she's all buddy-buddy with him! Gah! Toshi loves Vegeta! Does that mean what I think it does? Is Vegeta going to be become a polygamist? I think that's how you spell that. Very cute chapter though! I loved it! Must read more!

Coolness! They went back to Veggie and Piccolo's world! Hm, I'm thinking maybe that the term twin-soul means more like soul-mate. And that very well could be the case of Piccolo and Mara...they could perhaps be lovers..I don't know! Piccolo seems really nice. Hehe, "Nice to finally meet you Kakarott!" I really liked that line! This just keeps getting better! I can't wait until Bulma meets Toshi! ROWR! Catfight! J/k, but then again you never know!

Hm, I was thinking the same thing as Vegeta! I'm glad that Toshi's ok though. *smile* It seems to me that they'll have to be inseparable. I think Bulma's not gonna like that! Well, at least the whole time thing is ok. That makes alot of sense. I gotta know what happens next!

Goodness, I just thought of something! If Piccolo died on earth or namek, what did Mara feel when that happened? They weren't in each other's prescence, but she must've felt SOMETHING. Like a sort of loss I guess you could say. Awesome fight scene, I'm greatly relieved that the dragon is gone, but I felt bad for the people crushed too *sniff* OOh I can't wait until the girls go back with them into their world. Bulma will probably get jealous *snicker*

Great chapter, I really enjoyed it!

Hmm, I wonder if one twin dies after they found each other, will the otherone die too? OMG I totally did not expect that attack thing! How many of the twins are female and male? Are they mostly female/female, male/male and these two are just different? I guess I'll find out. Aw..kitsunes! KAWAII! OOh, this is getting exciting! Must read more!