update

interesting so far looking forward to the next chapter

love the story!update soon
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alright - one. You have a good imagination, but you rush it too much. this actually takes away from the story. You need to slow down, build up the scene, and work on the charactors more. It's not bad if you are an absolute beginner, and this was your first or second fic. You have the imagination to do well when writing. BUT.. it needs work. the first three chapters aren't even long enough to be called one chapter, and the charactors are very, very shallow. you can't picture the scene in your mind, because there is too little description.
Pretend that you are painting a picture that is three dimensional. the first dimension would be the background, the second would be thoughts and feelings, fourth would be spoken dialouge (sp, i know), and the fifth dimension is action. Don't be afraid to add detail - you can always read through and edit before you post.
~Caliko

hay thats good the chapters seam a bit short

OH M'GOD, OH M'GOD! tHIS ONE OF THE BEST FREAKIN FICS EVUH!! Inuyasha's in it too!! can't get too much better than that, ne? Could you get Fluffy in too? Oh, and it's a Katana with a K. Update soon!

*snort* Bwa ha ha ha ha ha ha! *pant pant* ha ha ha ha ha ha ha *gasp* ha ha ha ha ha ha!

This is incredibly funny! It is *so* worthy of a million other great reviews! :) I love it! Love it love it love it!

Please keep this up! I really enjoyed reading this! XP

~ Jovian Angel ~

PS Thanks a lot for revireing me *and* adding me onto your faves! WOW! I feel so loved!

hey this is a realy good story..you should really make the chappoes longer and write write write MORE WHO HO NAH.
keep up the good work
from you know who. *_~

Yay! *claps hands* Good ficcy. And could you please read my fic Kindergarten? And if you are interested, my fic When Trunks and Goten Went to Summer Camp has a pink Vegeta in it!! Oh well. I'm asking WAY too much of you. Please?!?!?!?!?!?!? Anywayz,
CYA

I HATE YOUR FIC ALLISON!!! You make me look like a complete and total moron!(Which I am NOT) I am a highly articulated human being, NOT an elephant. Please alter your story or I will never give you another bit of food as long as we both live. Thats all thank you. And I'll have you know that I did not eat my brothers underpants. *buru*

Update soon! You'll make the next chapter longer right? Hope so ^_^

This should be funny. You know there's not enough of these. I think you should finish it (or at least write the next chapter).

I wanna see what happens next! pleeeese!!

Hey Al! Great story! Lol you know Gaia ia sooooooo gona kill you! LOL well right the next chapter befor you get to my house! LOL well beware gaias rathe! Cya

Ur BFF,
Maddy