After a few days, I finally got a chance to go on to the computer,(not that I'm buzy, but my parents won't let me) but anyways, I decided it would be best to read your story, since it makes me laugh and it makes me forget about all the troubles for a time.
I finished the whole thing in one sitting and LOVED it, though there are a few sentences that're confusing, it didn't really affect the story, but I thought you might want to know.
I guess now I'll just have to wait 'till you got time to write the rest of the story. You said you have college to worry about, but why didn't you write in the summer hollidays?
Again, I repeat, I TRULY TRULY LOVED YOUR STORY! Sometimes it actually sounds much better than what Terry Brooks wrote.
So PLEASE continue!

I just finished the first chapter, and I think it's great, except for one little problem. You say that Ben has accumulated many secret weapons through the years, well, innate magic is something that is born with not accumulated.
other than that, it's great, and I will tell you how I feel about chapter 2 when I finished it.

Great story so far...but I was a little dissapointed that Ben isn't keeping some of his own majic from the medalion that he was given. It was my understanding that his medalion was where his original majic came from, but this isn't explained very well. Also... is there any way to put the Paladin in here with a little more action? Just a thought...great story though... very entertaining and I do like the way it has been written.

*cry* *cry* What'd ya mean, "someday"?! Please don't tell me it'll be four years from now! *cynical voice says, "No, more like three years. Better?"* It's getting good! Really, really good! =D Please update soon! Pretty please with sugar on top?

Laugh and Smile!
-Starbo

ehi interesting plot!!i love those books...anyways i belive that shannara is the name of the family that can use the sword..but who cares..
update please!!(w allanon!!)

Cool. Absolutely amazing. What has Ben done? Interesting, and it certainly makes me want to read on to find out what is going to be happened. Chapter Five was short, I think you could just make Six part of five, if you know what I mean. *shrug* Anyway, it be up to you. Can't wait until your next chapter.thats not going to be the end of it, is it? Please.tell me its not.

Very Good. Once again, strong characterisation, believable plot, and good dialogue. A small bit of confusion around the Seeing Spell. Does Ben have the Sword, or shea? Who was shrinking the sword, and if Ben did, how has Shea got it? Just a few questions that might be due to my denseness today, but apart from that, everything was hunky dory. I haven't added you to my favourites list because I'm not sure how, but if anyone is ever going to go on, you sure are. Keep on telling me when you update. I do check, but sometimes I forget to. Anyway, very very good.

Hmmm, I am intrigued. How do you slap a voice?
I feew sowwy fo da poow witchy-poo! Are you going to put Panamon Creel in? *bounces excitedly* Or any Word and Void?

This is geting intresting.

Hi, I loved this Chapter. It had tension, accuracy, good speed...everything you could ask for in a Chapter.

Your portrayal of all the characters seems good, and, although it has been a long time since I've read Terry Brooks, you obviously show that you know what you are talking about.

Justg a thought, ignore me if you don't like it, or just smile and nod if you already had the idea. I just thought that maybe Nightshade could become an ally of Ben Holiday, you know, realising she has to help him to pull through, or even becoming good...but then, if you are sticking to the Nightshade-is-EVIL route, then I'll just shut up and let you get on with it.

Great job! Can't wait until your next Chapter!

You already know I LOVE this story. :)
It might help if you put a line in between each paragraph, it'd make it easier to read.
Oh, and if you need any help with references to Sword or First King, I just read them, so just ask!
Put the rest of the story up!

Well...since you begged for a review, authoress, I suppose I'll have to give you one. I really liked the chapter, and there were no glaring mistakes. A quick tip, whenever you have finished writing something, read it aloud to yourself, it helps you work out the best way to write things, stops stupid mistakes, etc etc.
My comment on the 'once upon a time' was only a quick tip. I understand while you did it, but maybe you could add in something to explain he was not being entirely serious about it, you know, like: 'Ben's voice held a sarcasm as he spoke 'Once upon a time''. Anyway, just a thought. I still love this story, and this Chapter makes me want to read more...just curious about a couple of things: Is Shea in this one? Is it after Shea's time? Is their going to be cool elfstony magic? And finally, could you make Questor a druid or something with magic that works? Oh, and I loved your representation of Nightshade...good job!

P.S: Sorry about killing Lindly, but don't worry, Deirdre gets her revenge...

Two words: Gordon Bennett...

This was amazing! You got every single character just right, you added in the subtle (hahahaha) American humour from Ben's point of view, you melded the two separate worlds together VERY well...are you Terry Brooks? I loved it, and I will be reading the next chapter.

Oh, only two drawbacks. When Ben is explaining to Strabo, he says 'once upon a time'. Major problem there, in a minor kinda way. Although not a vital link in the story, it still makes readers subconciously view your work as 'childish' and in the same league as a fairy story, instead of high, heroic fantasy.

A further, extremely tiny, problem was the ommission of capitals towards the end. A couple of 'bens' turned up. Those are REALLY tiny problems, but often, paying attention to tiny stuff can make big stuff better.

Apart from those two criticisms, I really really really really really really really LOVED your story, and by LOVED I mean LOVED!!! :):):):):) I don't know what else to write, but every step of the way, I was being drawn in, without any suspension of belief. Amazing...

Oh yes, and thanks for the reviews of my AC fic.