 Emily 2009-09-14 . chapter 3 Wow, that was a really good story, and I really liked it. You did a great job with Heimlich's German pronunciation, and the personalities of everyone, and I especially liked it when everyone was taking digs at Francis. That seems so like the troup to do that. : )Great job!
But I do have a few problems with this story: I doubt that two such gregarious characters like the pill bugs could ever have been so silent. That just doesn't seem right to me. And I don't think it's Hungarian they're speaking, just gibberish. But hey, that's why fanfiction exists, right? So we can make things up. : )
Bye, keep up the good work! |