two words for ya: Kick **!

Composing this, you probably thought that leaving off the identifying pronouns for Joe's point of view or action at the begining of each sentence was cool. It's not cool. It's confusing. It's stupid. Before you write again, please go to Borders or the big-box bookstore of your choice and buy a grammar book. Read the chapters titled "Tense Sequence", and "Nouns and Pronouns". For that matter, read the whole book. Humanity depends on it.

Wow, I can't believe this hasn't gotten a review yet! Excellent work. I LOVE the way you have Joe's thoughts in incomplete yet perfectly understandable sentences, because that is just like him. And, God, the ending, this line in particular- "his world had taken that final step sideways and dropped him off the edge." - the realization that he wanted Ken's smile . . . Just wow. I'm inarticulate. Fabulous, fabulous job on this. Will there be more? Please?