looks like you toned down the more poetic parts of the story and stuck to narrative... not that it's a bad thing though... it still came out rather nicely... especially the "talk" with asuka's mommy...

i'm still wondering how you're gonna pull a rabbit out of rei's and kaworu's "relationship" though... kinda freaks me out imagining the two of them together sometimes... *shudder*

omg...that was beautiful. i loved the different perspectives of all the different people. esp. asuka's dream with her mamie. and i also loved shinji.

am waiting eagerly for the next chapter.

/meemee

ack this was so good. i absolutely love your style of writing, it has such a poetic and symbolic feel. this was a brilliant beginning.