Wow. I loved this. I think it actually made me understand Aoshi a little bit more. I love the whole, between answers A and B, which would you choose? It's always C.
I think this works very well as a poem set right after his second fight with Kenshin. It's good that he finally realizes it's not "Okashira" or "the strongest" that he is, but he's just Aoshi.
I also really liked how both questions were answered with the same word. Anyway, just saying, this poem really did it for me.

i like it, i like it!^_^

This was excellent! I love how Aoshi resolved the conflict. Just to be human. Me Too!

*looks a bit dazed* I LOVE IT! Wow...never read... anything like that...deep...amazing...beyond my thinking level...simply stuning...and a whole lot more adjectives I can't think of right now because I don't pay much attention in English (unless I have too)
I've never tried writing an Aoshi poem...I might try it later.
I'm better at Soujiro poems. *grins*
Soujiro: Why don't you try writing poems about
others? *innocent grin*
Cirya: Why are you so insistent on me writing
other poems? You do that a lot you know?
Misao: *looks annoyed* Well, maybe it's because
your a bit *cough* obsessive *cough* a bout
Soujiro.
Cirya: *looks politly confused* uhh...*relizes
what Misao said* Oh no, no, no, no. I like my
Sou-chan too much *hugs Soujiro*
*Misao stares* *Soujiro starts to turn blue to
match his shirt*
Misao: Uh...Cirya-chan. You're suffocating him.
*Cirya lets go in surprise and stars fussing*
Cirya: Oh! Sou-chan, did I hurt you?
*Soujiro appears to be unconcious*
Misao: Now, look what you did! Could it get any
worse?
Cirya: *evil grin* Nope, only better. Because I
guess I'll have to try a mouth-to-mouth
resuscitation.
Soujiro: *jumps to his feet with an, "I'm fine!"
and runs away at Shucuchi speed*
Cirya: I was only kidding.
Misao: *rolls eyes*
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Sorry, I would have reviewed sooner, but I had all this stupid homework every night. I'll review more later. I loved the poem. YAY!

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I'm just speechless. Wow. Thanks. I think. I'm honored.

This is good! I'm not that keen on mythologies, and not really studied on literary writing to be a good judge on the technicalities on it. I just go with my gut. And I like it.

But would you like me to be honest with this one? It does express Aoshi's feelings well. But it would be much better if you're thinking in his perspective: what he feels, and, more importantly, what he knows. For instance: "mama". I don't know how to explain it. It's just that I don't see him calling his mother that. What I'm trying to say is that try to think in Japanese or something. Essentially, try not to Westernize him as much as you can. I'm not sure if I'm making sense. I'm working right now, you see. ^_^;

Think of this as a way of returning the favor of "dedicating" this poem. Hope you don't take this as putting you down... m(_ _)m


Daiji