Ok, I couldn't really read the story. There is a simple reason why. The next time you write something like this, keep the following things in mind.
1. This story seems to move very fast because your text is all lumped together. There is an easy way to fix this...every time there is a new quote, it also means you create a new paragraph by inserting a hard return before the quote.
2. It might also be easier on your readers (because some, like me, get headaches trying to read "chapters" this long.)
3. It gets boring. If you must do long chapters, use better, less hasty descriptions so you will not have to worry about people saying there wasn't enough detail.

That was sooooooo funny! I was going to do something like that for my 2nd review since my first one is crap...... I'm a fanfic junkie and I need more!!! Is that all you were going to write because it would be sooooooo cool if you like did scenes before the wedding and continue with the Kaboom- I really wanted to do it but since you did- can you do a little more? My email is Janae302@hotmail.com i fyou have anything to say to me. If it's to say i'm a crazy teenager- i already know.

SailorSlave^_^