finish...
7/10 (so far)

What's going to happen to Miranda? Just so you know, I think chapters 2 and 3 were accidnetly switched. You might want to fix that. Good story!

Whatever Happened to Miranda? Sound vaguely like Whatever Happened to Janie? and they both involve kidknapping. Anyway, I love this story. I love kidknapping (well, not like...really, but...you know what I mean.)

1) Your story has very imature (in style) dialog.
2) It is slightly suspenseful. It could be better if you improved your word choice and order of thematic elements.
3) Could Gordo and Lizzie "Profess their love for each other" in a less obvious way?
4) Keep practicing!

um this is really for the last chap but.... is the boy's name Keith or Johnathan you had both...are you copying my names?

Emotional proteins? I'm no biologist, but those sound pretty non-existent to me. I have to admit my disappointment with this ending. It's painfully anti-climactic. You had the suspense building so expertly through the whole story, and then everything fell apart at the end. Good story, lame ending.

Oh my, I am so freakin out! This is great! Can't wait to read the rest!

why why why why why?!!
If it's earlier in the story: 1)I'm gonna feel completely stupid 2) tell me so I can figure it out!!! Good story~keep up the good work!

You know you didnt have to have a happy ending (lol jk). It needed a longer wait till the ending.I

I don't understand this...your just going to end it like that? Like, just forget about the story?

Oh-kay. Where's this chapter then?????? All I c is an author's note....... Just thought u'd like 2 know if u didn't already. Adios!
~~~Lenni~~~
KTBSPA & KTNTPA!!!!!

This is a really good story! keep writ'en!

Another cliff *sigh*

Zoe how dare you leave me on a cliff hanger. lol jk. Very good I like it alot but please finish it!

Very suspensful and a bit creepy, but yet very good.