talk about I nearly screamed when I saw this was updated ^^
god I love this story!
please update soon

p.s it is a serenityXendymion pairing isn't it? it just seems to me that serenity fawns over Diamond a little too much

I have read this story and it great. The trials of a young girl no matter whether she be common or of royal blood, they are still trial, she does need to find herself. Whether at the end she will end up with her soul mate it is up to both of them to work this out. One thing that I would like to see by the end is harmony and find out who betrayed the people of the moon. Good Luck.

Aww, I almost cried. I must admit, I like Diamond so much more than Endymion in this story, and that's saying a lot because I am such a hardcore Usagi/Mamoru shipper. I'm not sure why, but I'm just really rooting for Serenity to end up with Diamond in this story, even though I know that she'll end up with Endy. Anyways, it's 1:40 am right now and I just re-read this whole fic in one sitting. Cannot wait for the next update!

I fail to see why, with all the ** that's been happening to Serenity, that she s still such an idiot. Holding onto ones "hope", memories of the old life and being a teenager can give you certain liberties, as far as actions and curiosity, but this is ridiculous. Actually, I feel it would be completely adequate to call Serenity insane. She continues to do the same thing repeatedly and hopes for a different result - insanity. Not only is this frustrating, but utterly annoying. She is THE only static character in this story. With the progress that's been made in both time and in the other characters, this leaves little hope that she'll ever change. How sad - and extremely detrimental to the story line. I'm disappointed.

Ugh, I hate desperate, simpering Usagi. It's pathetic. The girl has no self-confidence, nor self-preservation and worse, she thinks herself a know-it-all. There is a huge difference between being sheltered and not knowing what goes on in the world. And I thought her seeing the slave was supposed to be part of her wake up call. DX Hopefully, you'll get past this/her idiocy soon. In any case, please knock some common sense into her sometimes during the upcoming chapter. *continues reading*

PS - I was just thinking about this, but why IS Serentiy so naive? She has been sheltered for nine or ten years, but she wasn't a newborn when Luna and Artemis adopted her. Shouldn't Serenity be at least a little emotionally scarred and/or traumatized? I mean, yes, children see murders and dead bodies when they're young and don't usually need to be sent to psychiatric wards immediately afterward, but it DOES usually effect their psyche in some disturbing manner (i.e. a fascination with death/being dead/the afterlife). Serenity DID see numerous people being maimed and killed when she was a child.

P.P.S - You really like metaphors, don't you?

~Animefreak242
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Kawaii Girl

Hn... It's strange. I knew this was going to happen, but I can't feel saddened by it (in the way you usually feel upset or sad when characters in love/lust go through a difficult time). For one, it was known what would happen. It's necessary to the story and it was obviously supposed to be ironic that Darien told Serenity the truth, but once she does, he's not nearly as understanding as she. The other is that there is so little of their relationship, the relationship that is supposed to be the basis of the story, actually IN the story.

I'm sure you'll go deeper into their ups and downs once it becomes instrumental to uniting the Lunarians and the Terrans, but shouldn't that also happen now? For - if anything - a contrast to how deeper and mature their feelings have becomes with knowledge, understanding and without prejudice? I mean, we're on the fourth chapter and he's already found out about her. It's little weird. *shrugs* Just saying...

I like this story. It's progressing pretty well. I like how you made Luna and Artemis Serenity's parents. Luna practically raised her as it was... THe relationship is also progressing a bit quickly. They are in "love" already? Strange, considering they met ony once and spoke so briefly. It is so sudden...

I do have a few questions and suggestions though. My first question is if you'll include the other senshi in this story? From the prophecy in the beginning, it seemed as if they would be included, but you cleared that up quickly. One other thing I wondered was the year and continent this story is taking place in/on. The way you speak of the fashion and mannerisms, it seems like Serenity is living in sixteenth century England. The fact that the majority of the people have dark hair and eyes, as well as the use of the English names also suggests this.

A suggestion I had to you is a marking of some sort to represent the shift in time or a change in location and/or the person we're viewing. The entire story runs together. Maybe adding an extra space between the paragraphs to represent change in perspective and/or the person we're viewing and an actual border (i.e.: ~*~*~*~*~*~*~) to represent a change in location or gap in time. You don't have to say anything, but just a hint of some sort would help the story flow better.

~Animefreak242
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Kawaii Girl

I am so pleased that you've not abandoned this story- it is incredible, really and truly! I have enjoyed every minute of every chapter and as the climax looms near I can't wait to find out how the adventures will unfold. Here's hoping we find out soon!

Waiting with bated breath,

Nami

Thank you so much! I really love this story it's one of my favorites; the ones that, even if long time passes they stick with you forever.
I'm a book worm too, and I really enjoy fantasy books, so this story in my humble opinion is totally worth it.
Please continue, don't ever quit 'cause you are a true writter and a great one I add. :)
Best wishes
Vanny.

i love your story. its so well put together and such a new idea i love it. i like how you put in all of the girls and the generals and how it all works together perfectly. i can't wait for the next chapter.

I'm so glad that you are still working on this story! I'm not a regular of Fanfiction like I use to be, but when I have the extra time, I log on and see what my favorite authors are working on. I'm pleased to see that this is still a work in progress. As usual, wonderful!

a well spun tail - u had me from start to end (well so far) looking forward to an update

holy crap! this is the best sailor moon story i have ever read! everything about it is just sublime. the writing, the plot, the characterization... everything. It brings out so much emotion in me, i cry when serenity is sad, i am anxious when something bad might happen, delighted when endymion and serenity are together, and frustrated when endymion is imprisoned within his own walls. I hope it does not take long for another chapter. It was all i could do to drag myself away from the computer so i could eat.
not so patiently waiting your next chapter.
p.s.- this story would make a great book- with adjustments to the names, of course. you really are a fantastic writer.

Selfishness, greed and fear. Cowards way of justifiying.

Seems Earth has grown not at all.

Endymion least of all.

Endy and Sere aproach this at two different paths.

Serenity finding the strength to become what she always was.

Endy, saddley, becoming more and more a coward with out a back bone to see.

Wonder how he will live with his peoples crimes, if he ever really see's them.

Myself, i think the King should suffer more then just death.

Didn't you once call him the bloody king?

What if he was cursed to wear the blood of all innocents he's killed through actions and ideals.

Reliving there lives, joys, fears, hates, and mostly deaths and slavery, until he truely is repentant?

Great chapter. Glade you continuing it.


Agreed. Fantasy, adventure, romance. Good stuff.

Look forward to more.

Ja ne

JIm

I'm very glad that you updated and that you're intending to finish this!! Despite Diamond's previous forcefulness I'm starting to like him and kind of hope that he and Serenity become a couple. Don't think that's where you're planning to head though. Thanks for updating this! I'll most definitely be reading the next chapter whenever it comes out.