I hope you haven't stopped writing. This is so GR8! But, how does it end?...

*tear* the story was going like fantastic! When you do get a chance, please update it soon :D I really enjoyed it. thanks.

hey don't change this in any way it's like one of the best FF i have ever read. PP and GQ are good to i read them a lot this is my 2nd or 3rd time reading this.Please keep up the good work.

I thought their flower days where when they were like 21 i don't know what put that into my head where my brain is supposed to be but i know it's not 16 (ok i'm 95% sure)

okay, first i have to say i completely love this story. Then, i must say i think i said it in the other review, but i love kaelen. His personality is so great, and he is so sweet to Lana. Please let their "courtship" turn into more. Anywho, i know you have to finish you other story...but maybe a few updates here and there? and yes, i have read all your other stories. So the case is kind of like magical e-mail...where she puts the letter in and sends it diectly to him...is lord alasseo Lord Felix? very good story! i love it...and sorry for rambling. Merry Christmas, or Happy Holidays!

i understand your want to finish one story, i hope you will finish it soon though, since i am dying to read more. Also, i think they should stop beating around th bush, and during their mock relationship really fall in love with each other. please hurry and hopefully update sooN!

I love This story.Can't wait for you to update it!

this story is great and i dearly hope there is more coming!!

Nimaric and Brimiar?!

Ahh! Do you realize that this HURTS? I love love love this story! Please hurry with the other story! GAH! I love this one! Please please hurry!

WHAT!! NO NO NO NO NO NO!

Please finish the story. It's not very nice to just leave it hanging...

Thanks!

Great story, plz plz plz plz update

Hey are you ever going to finish this story? I've been checking on it for the past two years to see if you've updated and have been many times dissappointed to find that you haven't. It would be great if you could try to finish it. Many of your readers would really appreciate it!!

So let's make with the constructive criticism first and then I can praise you for how brilliantly written this fic is. Cool? Awesome.
Okay so I know you've said that Lana is a Mary Sue. Point made, but I don't think it's too late to give her flaws. I mean, there's still the big face off between her (I'm assuming she's gonna take center stage when the time comes) and Lord Felix. I don't know *what* flaws, but some flukes here and there in her dashing character wouldn't hurt.
All your characters seem to be...well: beautiful & handsome, excellent at swordplay, extremely overly magical (Naria, at least) and just plain perfect. It's a little irksome...I know that Kaelen does have the temper issue, though.
And the merry go round that is Lana and Kaelen's relationship. Friends...friends with benefit...summer fling...love? I know it's developing, but try to stick with one for more than a chapter.
Repetition also seems to be a bit of an issue, but only it seems in the first half of the fic. Repeating of words, mainly, but I do admire the use of your extensive vocabulary (it definitely makes for a more compelling read!). Names at times, too (Derric and Derrick?) seem to be misspelled or have a letter dropped off, but maybe that's just their nickname.
Hoping that wasn't too harsh (It's hard to convey the tone in words online, but really, it's solely advice). Now onto all the wonderful aspects of the fic, which do outweigh the previously listed! The plot is intricate (with a bubbly narrator to boot) and even though the bad guy seems obvious; the little obstacles Lana & co. have encountered along the way definitely give the plot depth.
The parallels between Mel and Danric and Lana and Kaelen are there, but you've done a nice job of making it more original.
All in all, despite the Mary Sue-ness, I really want to see how this fic plays out. You're a great writer and your dialogue (and fluff ;) flow very naturally.
I've been known to talk on and on, so coming to a close, I hope you do post the next installment soon - the reveal of Alasseo, perhaps? :)

~Valarie