Very cool. The only weird thing was...i know a Jeff Smith. :-)

This is a very good idea, but it would be a better story if it flowed better and you had more transitions to fill up the holes.

Well written fan fic. Hope to read more soon

Sorry to break it to all you devoted fans, but my freind is a big time procrastinator. I'll bug her for you. But I doubt it'll do any good. Sorry. (Email me if you want. I love meeting new people.)

I was a little confused by the end, but the rest of the story was very good. Keep writing.

Interesting to say the least, but needs more detail. Your thoughts are unorganized and random, try working on that a little more. Other than that, it makes for a compelling storyline.

Uh? that's it? Youre gonna leave me hangin' like that? Get done, I'm hooked. ;)

POST THE STORY! POST THE STORY!

I think I reveiwed before but i'm just wondering are you going to write part two soon? I can't wait to find out what happens!

Hehe, I know I already reviewed this, but are you going to write a part 2? It's really good and I want to see what happens! :c)

Oh! Great story so far! Please hurry and write part 2!

MORE! WHAT HAPPENS TO MY GARY?

So far so very good.

Hmmm...pretty good.

Great job! (I'm glad you used my suggestions.) I can't wait to read the next part! Keep writing. (I'm surprised you didn't have Chuck go buy a lottery ticket or go to the horse track as soon as he realised it was '*tomorrow's* newspaper today' But it is just like Chuck to expect a reward) Hmmm. I wonder how the doctor is gonna fit into the story. ::wink wink:: ;o) LoL! Ok, I'm blabbing. Sorry. I guess what I'm trying to say is; GREAT JOB! KEEP WRITING! luv ya -Melodey