Hi Stephen! I like! But, oddly enough, it was too long.. that's the only flaw! Bye bye! ( and thanks for bringing me back to life, that toaster hurt) -Bebbi (hah hah! Beppi..)

Wow this is really good. I especially like how your having Sephiorth comment on everything Cloud does (It was pretty funny when he had to dress up like a girl LOL) Anyway, I notice you haven't updated in awhile so please update soon.

i like your work! please update!

It's good, please continue!

Looking good! Good luck on those tests, I know how bad they can be.

I can't wait to see what's coming up. I loved the Corneo scenario. It was great.

Flynnman

It's a great story. Just one complaint.

Could you please use commas and periods? Following some of these sentences is very confusing. Nothing wrong with the story itself, but without commas, your sentences run on and on, and it's hard to make sense of it.

Flynnman

don't quit! I like your story!!!

nice....




'Cause your a gutless worm

Aeris wasn't sephiroth's boyfriend it was Zack...

"I gotta place where i can crash for awhile"said Zack.
"Wait ,no the mother lives there"
ect.
good try.

that was great dude\dudett I like the thoughts but you spelt through wrong on the title.

You're rushing. Don't rush. If you slow down, concentrate on the details, specifically mark when there are flashbacks, improve on the grammar and punctuation, this fic can be so much better than it already is. You shouldn't go so fast. I read this and I can practically HEAR someone speaking really fast. I know this here is a bit harsh, and I know I'm not going to be your favorite reviewer, but you gotta think.

Not bad. Work on the punctuation. Don't discontinue it. You got potential; I can feel it!

ooohhh... I like this one... its awesome. Keep writing, please!

OK...a somewhat lengthy review.

This is a fun story, and I really like your concept for Masamune's creation. The scene where Sephy rescued Aeris & got all mushy was so cute! I also like his anger at Hojo when he goes back with her.

You have some GREAT ideas. However, it was difficult to read at times. Whenever someone speaks, there's no division of sentences. So, when Hojo is describing Masamune, or Aeris is telling Seph about Hojo's treatment of her, EVERYTHING comes out in one breath. I would go back & look at those places. Also, watch for spoken dialogue; it's tough sometimes to realize that someone is speaking, because there are no quotes around some of the sentences.

Other than the technical stuff, I'm enjoying your fic a lot. Keep going! I look forward to more.

*wark*

Not bad. Not bad at all. I like it.