The link to the first chapter is broken, and I can't seem to find this story anywhere else. Any chance you could reupload it somewhere?

vey good and your one of the only people who actuly is keeping them in character I ORDER U TO KEEP WRITING!pease?

(0_0) ...Gee whiz, Jake and Rachel? Is'nt that incest? Ah well, hope this turns out okay. Please write more.

aw, c'mon, forlay! i read your drama, brilliant rach/tobias story and all, which was GREAT. then you go and cook this ** up, damn.

this is gross, what the heck were you thinking!? I had to stop half way through the first page because I could stand to go further! You must be a extremly troubled person.

why oh why do you have to let them end it this way?
tell!
I demand mortal!
*takes a deep breath and tries to sort out her seriously demented mind*
'kay i liked the story but it was too sad, please continue and even if C&J dont work it out, dont let Tobias suffer, he's lost so much dont make him lose Rachel...please!
I beg of thee stupid earth monkey!!
*maybe i shouldn't have called you that?*
buebue... I mean BYE BYE?
*who in their right mind would put the U next to the Y?*

dude if i were u i would hang myself

I must give you this: you are a brave, brave soul. Even if I wanted to write a pairing like this, I certainly wouldn't have the guts to post it! *g* Anywho, it's well-written and pretty in character (well, as in character as can be, given the situation). The main gripe I have with it has nothing to do w/ the writing, or even J/C and T/R breaking up, but the incest. It just leaves kind of a sick-feling, y'know, and it puts an unfair damper on my entire outlook of this fic. But again, I congratulate you on tackling the controversial nature of this subject w/ as much dignity as possible!

You updated? YOU updated? You UPDATED?

Heehee, sorry, I had to get that out of my system. Well, first off, yay Marco! I like Marco, and it was good to see that at least everything's out in the open now. And I liked seeing Loren reach out to Rachel, that was sweet. I'm finding that for some reason I'm turning into a big Loren fan these days...anyway, gah. This fic. I love it but there are times when it still gives me major squickies...even though I think people should love who ever they're going to love as long as they're happy and it's consenstual. But, y'know, I can't help but wonder if Jake and Rachel are making a mistake. I mean, since like Ax said, they aren't planning to have children and they want to keep the parents out of this...I think they're gonna have to realize that they'll have to fess up to EVERYBODY eventually, not just their friends. And while yay they're in love and good for them, I'm not sure if what they've got is strong enough for all that...and now they've ended their relationships with Cassie and Tobias. And in Jake's case, possibly with Marco, too.

It is good to see they've got a genuine show of support with their buds, but like I said -- I just get the feeling this is a huge mistake they're making. Doesn't mean I won't read the next two chapters, though. Get to writing, you! **shoves Forlay back to her computer to write**

Good old Marco. If anyone could keep the group together...

I'm so glad you included a link to the first part because that part was so hot! I'm really glad there's going to be another two parts to this!
Just one thing - is it actually illegal to have sex with your cousin? I mean, here you can marry your first cousin and that's the closest type of cousin you can have, so... It's definitely frowned upon anyway!
I'm now exploring your site and really enjoying the stuff up there! Go you!

You are a ** sick in-bred **! Jake and Rachel are ** RELATED!

I read the prequel to this story and loved it; I hope you continue with this one. Are you going to throw in some Tobias/Cassie, or more Rachel/Jake? Whoa, I think my face just settled into that "Can I open a Christmas present early, Mommy?" face that I haven't made since high school. Seriously, though, I adored your previous fic so much I saved it on my comp so I could re-read it when and if I ever lost Internet; please keep going with this!

dued this was ** sick man how could do that there related maby u did it because your mom and dad were related before they were married u sick **

I didn't like you before because you paired me with Cassie but now I know your a sick mother ***!