"Not all the water that runs down his skin is without salt."
Words are hardly ever enough to express something as deep and as untouchable as sorrow. However, there are times when someone manages to phrase them as beautifully as you have to give us a picture. An idea.
-- that's definitely the next best thing.

Heh. Go Gibson! Neuromancer is also one of my favorite books.

Still love it. Great fic, hoping for an update in the not-too-distant future.

Wasn't planning to review until the end of the story, or however much is written, but I had to.

Heh. I loved Sophie's World. Felt kind of bad for the waitress in the restaurant...

All the italics for the internal monolouge definitely reminded me of Stephen King. It works.

Love it!

Awesome! But wait, Raven's dreamtime was in 2005, and Neo's was in 19. So what's going on? Anyway, great job and please do more soon!

Excellent. Your characterization of Raven suits him perfectly that it all makes sense.

"And like in all the old stories, the knowledge of a being's true name will give you power over it. " --> I especially liked this line. It's enough motivation to get him back at the powerplant. Your theory on settlements is also a very good way to give ships reasons to travel and not to remain in Zion... the information in this fic is believable.

Hurry up and update! Quick!

~chord

Hey Blake,

I know what you told me but i couldn't help myself. Anyhoo this story is farken mad. Good work.

P.s. i can guess wat you didn't want me to see so i didn't read it...you know the one i mean.

Troll

Whot, Blake! The ending of this chap was superb and beautifully descriptive, and I love your character. Plus, you put Neuromancer in! I did the same thing with a dictionary, btw. ^^ Yay Blake!

Yay!
Finally you wrote more!! I really like the fact that he isn't hte first to be unplugged but he's seems to be the one (at this point) who hasn't gone insane yet. Please don't make him go insane.

It would be hard to write I think but it keeps you interested. ANd you have some good ideas.

Maybe one thing you could do is have him get hints of Neo and the Neb crew. That would be cool. Even thought they probably aren't born yet.

Well worth the wait, Blake. Nice to see you stuck wiff your orginal concept of making Zion multi-cultural. Damn you, you can speak in German! Fluently! Aeigh.

What confuses me is Tristan. Is he really nineteen years old? Or are we talking Unplugged Years here, and the reason he's all shrivelled up is because they lack the medicinal treatment or whatnot that the unplugged need?

Other than that bit, I loved this chapter! The last sequence was exectued perfectly; dreamworldrealworld and the Matrix. I like how you made Raven sure of himself.

Next chappie. Now, please. ^_^

~chord

Damn this is about the coolest Matrix fic I have read. I really can't wait to see what our young Raven is capable of inside the Matrix but ya gotta get him plugged up first don,tcha

WOW! This story is FANTASTIC! I Love it. Great writing, great story, great character building. Everything is wonderful. Please update it soon, I want to know how it all ends. It is an awesome story, I feel as though I am reading a prequel to the matrix. Maybe you could even sell it to Warner Brothers. Keep up the great work. Peace
xxx Destiny xxx

Good chapter, Blake. I enjoyed the cuteness between Nuala and Raven =) While I didn't really make the connection that this Neb is the predecessor to Morph's ship, you should remember that you don't need to explain everything to people. Your readers should be smart enough to figure out that stuff hasn't been invented yet, ya know? If not then, well, there's not much you can do b/c then you'd have to explain everything to them. Keep up the good work.

~Zeph

That is soooo ccool! I love it. What happened to Neo and Morpheus and those guys? I just need to know!

Nice chappie, Blake. The history of the world was nicely-explained, in a way that needed too many complicated, scientific terms. I like the nice and simple stuff. Go you! ^^

I don't quite understand this little mix-up, though.

Raven is the First One, right? That means he got unplugged a good hundred years before Neo? How could it be that the year inside the Matrix is 2005, when Neo got unplugged in the year 1999? Or does the Matrix switch from past to future and back again?

*laughs*

BUT WAIT!!! The first sign of romance is most worthy of praise! Nuala offered her hand to Raven. Something Trinity would've done, only in a much more subtle manner, but I'm not complaining. ^^ Lovely!

(btw, what was Nuala doing next to Raven's bed when he wakes up?)

~chord

Wonderful new long-awaited chapter, Blake. I especially liked the part at the beginning; 'where am I?' Nice Gandalf memoir. That was intentional, right?

You seem to have established a nice, loving lil' crew. I'm excited to see where this is going to go and how Raven will be...*dum dum dum* The One!

Happy writing!

~MGypsy