This was really good. An interesting little in-between story, and I really enjoyed the bits on the Greek legends. Your takes on the characters were very good. Just for future stories, I would suggest reading over the document after you upload it, to make sure your paragraphs are correct, as alot of them were messed up in the last few chapters. Also, watch your use of they're/there/their, too/to and your/you're.

KrisEleven~

Good! The passangers are definately interesting. I like how noticable the shift in the story's tone was, when you shifted to River's section. That was really well done, and I think you have an excellent grasp of her character. The one spelling thing I noticed was that you use 'defiantly' instead of 'definately'.

KrisEleven~

This is good! I like you writing style: there were no mistakes at all that I could see. You have a great grasp of the characters and their dialogue/behaviour, etc.

KrisEleven~

The only flaws that I could find were a typo here and there. This is really an amazing story. I know that you wrote it a long time ago, but I just recently got onto the firefly fan boat, and am trying to catch up.

I just wanted to say that I particularly like this story because it does more than just characterize people, although it does that too. I like the fact that it had a very deep story, with social commentary and all that jazz. It was more than just someone imitating what they saw on tv. This story was a creative and original piece of work, and I enjoyed it very much.

-Lyla

Ok, I know it's been three years since you finished this, but i only just started reading Firefly fanfic so...
I usually avoid longer ones because so many are bad, but I am very glad I made an exception for yours. I thoroughly enjoyed it. I thought all the characters were well portrayed and the ocs were interesting as well. The plot was excellent.
I also liked that Mal has read the Odyssey

That was nothing if not beautiful. Well-crafted and well-written. Well-researched, too.

If I must add criticism, of which there is little need of, I would have to mention the tempo. While the story read fine (better than most), a tad quicker may have helped somewhat.

One scene that was missing was a brief moment where Zoe watches Wash with the Kubat boys, softening her opinion of her husband's behavior.

Oh, this was so very excellent. Lovely plot and emotion woven together. I'm a huge Simon/Kaylee fan and while I really longed for more to happen between them, it didn't matter, the passage at the end made it all good :)

I hope to read more from you.

That was a cute ending.

Ha! I was actually right about something! Poor Inara, er...Penelope.

Well, from what I know of mythology River is having a dream about being Cassandra. Actually, I think her and Cassandra are a lot alike. I know Cassandra was cursed to know all and have none believe her, but I don't remember by whom. The bloody bed thing is, in many cultures, that there are no men allowed in the birthing room. Though I am probably completely wrong these are, in truth, the mad ramblings of an equally mad girl.
Poor child, and what is with the sick girl? I have no idea...
Wonderful story.

(And yes, that really IS the name!)

Quite apart from the fact that you utilised my favourite mythology (and utilised it brilliantly both in River's strange and very in-character ramblings and within the plot itself which was a true Greek tragedy!), this was an effective and excellently written story.

The only minor quibble I have (apart from the weird formatting in some parts of the later chapters which meant one had to scroll over the page to see the end of the sentence!) was the bizarre misspellings. Things which would not have been picked up on a spellcheck because they're actual words, but are obvious typos.

I hesitate to ask, but, are you perhaps a little dyslexic? Because some of the more complicated words (and you used a few, which made the story even better) were spelt correctly and when you had someone 'poring' over a book you SPELT it that way, most people spell it wrong and use the term 'pour' which of course means something else entirely. Yet you substituted 'pail' for 'pale' and in another story 'riffle' for 'rifle' (those are just a couple of them).

I couldn't figure out why you spelt correctly most of the time yet the simplest errors crept in now and again. Strange.

You are obviously a fine writer and love what you do. I have enjoyed what you have written and I only bother reading the good fiction! I hope you don't let the minor quibbles have any effect on what you obviously enjoy doing and which those of us who enjoy a good read enjoy reading.

That was fantastic and I really mean that. YOu captured the spirit of the show brilliantly and protrayed the characters really well. An excellent bit of writing. Well done.

Another very enjoyable story. You can plot, you can characterise, you can pace your story and keep things exciting. (I did find the end a bit too easy, but even so, this was good.)

But you really do need a beta reader.

Eve

Interesting story; it kept me reading to the end. Liked the Greek mythology; liked the way the plot played out. Interesting main villian; shows what crazy is really like, compared to our poor damaged River! But Kaylee's character is off; she isn't as weak or easily frightened as written. Simon doesn't call Mal "sir" and referring to Simon as "boy" was really annoying; Simon and Kaylee are not children and no one on the crew has ever given any indication of thinking of them that way. I had trouble getting through some of the written-out dialect, and please - spellcheck. Maybe with a beta who can spell, instead of the computer; auto spellcheck won't catch the difference between "pail" and "pale" for example. Good plot, good characters for the most part, but the spelling and dialect nearly killed it for me.

AH. That was such a sweet ending. Sorry it took so long for me to review. I liked it.