Well, I like the prose in the first part a Lot! I'm not such a fan of the song, though, and it feels rather out of place in the potterverse to me. and I care less for the abundance of death.
Great prose for those first several paragraphs, though!
Cheers!

Oh my goodness. I could literally hear the scream ripping from Harry's throat, echoing through the mountain. How utterly sad.

*Tries to tear eyes from computer screen. Fails. Starts bawling*. Oh no...poor Harry...you LOVE torturing him, don't you? But...** you write well...seriously...

Gripping.touching.your usual style really.

~_~Dark Blood~_~

Ack! Evil Angst! Ack! AaaacccK!

Powerful, of course. And quite touching. And so... lonely. Truly a piece that should stay as it is, standing alone, just like your severely traumatized Harry here. Well done.