UPDATE!

I like the story.

cool

short, but good! can't wait to read the rest!^^

i LOVEDit. More people should write about things like this. It was awesome.

Great story line going
However there are few things that you can do to improve your writing...
for example: character now are kind of somewhat OOC
and also show don't tell.
Proof read... there are few grammar errors
show the story on the character's action and thoughts
don't tried to explain their actions and thought
more details - always help...
keep on the great works and hopefully you'll improve.

good job with the poem

Great story so far!! :) can't wait til i finish.

Ok The Suspense is killing me so update soon or I'll be dead and I won't be able to read any more ( Pretends to faint for dramatic affect ) Just kidding but please do update soon

Hope you update soon...

It's very interesting, Good job

Continue soon Please and thank you

you have to write more I was getting in to it. That is a very great story and I like how you changed everything around with Naraku. I give your story 5 stars. So plaease write more because I would like to know what eles happens

Ahem. The idea for the story was great...but I'm not to sure you're a good enough author to write this. Not that I'm to judge. Lets just say that, the chapters are too short, the attempt to make them longer is stupid. There is no detail of the contents what so ever, and I don't get why people review on such a stupid fic. Even though your chapters are revised, I think you should consider this critism and like make the story better. Because this fic needs alot of improvement. I would give it a 1.5/10.

Allof yuor chapters r 2 short

wow. very dramatic. like it alot.