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| MissyJane 2002-12-14 ch 1,  | abuseThat was very good. Thank you for doing a Nick/Sara story!!! Keep them coming!! |
| Mooose 2002-12-13 ch 1, | abuseLoved it! :) |
| Emily Elizabeth 2002-12-13 ch 1, | abuseThat was a very touching story. Although the beginning was a bit confusing, but once I got that every other paragraph was Nick's POV and Sara's POV, then I really enjoyed it. I wouldn't continue this, because that is such a perfect ending, but pretty please more N/S? You write them so well together. |
| TAE1 2002-12-13 ch 1, | abuseIt's very difficult to follow when you switch first-person points of view. The premise was interesting but with the constant changes in POV, it was just too hard to keep straight who was thinking what. There were also a number of word-choice and grammatical errors. A good beta would be very helpful to you. You show promise and with the right guidance could become an excellent writer. |
| Grav 2002-12-12 ch 1, | abuseVery nice. Well written (if a touch confusing as to who is talking at the beginning), and your characterization is excellent. Grav |
| drvvh 2002-12-12 ch 1, | abuseThat was one of the best stories i've ever read!!! I really liked how one paragraph would be nick's pov and the next would be sara's. I honestly don't think you should write another chapter because the ending of this seem like a good place to stop. But another nick/sara story would be wounderful!! P.S. i had tears in my eye's at the end. loved it!!!! |