|Reviews for More Things in Heaven and On Earth|
| Werecat99 2/14/04 . chapter 1
I just LOVE HP stories from a Muggle POV. They are harder to write and, regretfully, they are the less reviewed. I guess if one doesn't mention H/D slash on the summary...
Anyway, on with the story. First of all, I loved the title. The tone was simple yet honest, the kind of which one should expect from a child. Its amazement was genuine, and it fitted the story perfectly.
Good work on this. A comment, though; in the first paragraph, you start many sentences with *I*. This does not look good, just from the presentation angle.
Other than that, great, refreshing story (when compared with the majority found on this site).
My shameless self-spamming: I have a similar story from A Muggle POV: Mnemosene, although it's still incomplete.
| ittybittytreefrog 11/2/03 . chapter 1
Brilliant, as usual. This is a really interesting idea and you wrote it very well. Great vignette. :)
| uninvitedCat 5/7/03 . chapter 1
An excellent vignette, well composed. There are some american touches in it though - for example, a fender in the UK is known as a bumper.
| Ada Kensington 4/19/03 . chapter 1
"He became a rat, common looking-like the ones you see sold in pet stores to feed snakes."
I like that... Very perceptive of you.
| AleniaOceanstar 4/2/03 . chapter 1
This is very good... I have no idea why you only have like two reviews...
| Jenna 2/19/03 . chapter 1
I'm really impressed, Magpie Poet. This one is really good. I wish J.K. Rowlings could see it. You keep in perfect character the entire way through, changing smoothly from his "teenage" voice of observations to his "four year-old" voice. I think the short sentences that convey extradordinary ideas work well and add to the reader's belief that what the character says is true. For instance, "When I was four I saw a man turn into a rat." That seems so odd, but the explanation that follows makes it seem logical. Also, the opening line about believing in magic: again, an odd thing to say so curtly, yet its reappearance emerges a theme that serves to bind the whole tale into one cohesive unit. This is great.
| jaffacake1 12/13/02 . chapter 1
Gave me the shivers.
Very melancholy. And a bit chilling in it's own way.
"Here be analytical bullshit" it proclaimed. Condescending asshole.
*giggles* Funny too, though. And I love that "there are more things in heaven and earth" quote. My friend's constantly saying it to me.
I digress... this was great - a perspective I never even thought of before and the way it was written... really simple in places but expanding on little details... well, in short, it rocked.