Reviews for The Photograph

Reviews For: The Photograph - Reviews: Page 1 of 4

HOUSEM.D.FanForever 2007-07-12 ch 14,	abusegreat job! Keep up the hard work :) Please write more DZ fan fiction :) you're very good :) God and peace Vanessa :)
Annie 2005-10-30 ch 15, anon.	abuseI greatly enjoyed your story. You did the different characters very well. I was so glad that I started to read it once it was already completed because I don't think i could have bared the antisipation. Vey good story, well done on completing it.
ILuvPiratesSavvy 2005-07-17 ch 15,	abuseI have no suggestions because...your story was very, very good! I was freaked out and hanging on the edge of my seat on chapter 13. LOL :)
annofargyle 2005-04-01 ch 15, anon.	abuseRaven, I remember having started to read this story awhile ago, but it was not finished and I hated being left hanging. But, it was worth the wait! I liked the twists and turns of your mystery plot, but I also liked the characterizations of the well known people such as Johnny - but also the new characters in Bangor as well. I think your strongest point is the detail and description that you put into your writing. It pulls the reader right in to your story. It was a long time coming, but when the writer is as good as you are, you can't bang out something like that on your computer in a flash! You are a very gifted writer!
Nicki-boo 2004-09-06 ch 15,	abuseWonderful job!! I really enjoyed it! :~)
Sky Pad 2004-08-29 ch 15,	abuseLoved the story! It would be a great eppy to see on tv too
October Sky 2004-07-30 ch 15,	abuseGREAT JOB! This would've made an awesome episode. +_+ October Sky
October Sky 2004-07-30 ch 13,	abuseI loved that chapter! I thought it was so cool hw he saw his own vision and chased after someone else's. +_+ October Sky
varin 2004-07-28 ch 15, anon.	abusethe best dead zone fic i have ever read thank you
October Sky 2004-07-16 ch 1,	abuseo.O Interesting... +_+ October Sky
Naboo325 2004-06-22 ch 15,	abuseExcellent writing and great stroy line! I felt like I was actually watching the show, very detailed and visual. Maybe you should submit it to the writers of the show, and maybe we can see it on TV. Keep writing!
Lozzie Cap 2003-11-03 ch 15, anon.	abuseRaven - SO pleased you finally finished this story. What a labour of love it must have been! Style Did you notice that the earlier chapters had quite a lot of repetition of words in them - sometimes in the same sentence, often in the same paragraph? Referring to Johnny as The Blonde and Dana as The Redhead really got to me after a while - calling someone "Blonde" has such poor associations nowadays, unfortunately. It was as though those were their only remarkable features. I also noticed there seemed to be an awful lot of squeaking - doors, chairs etc etc, and a great deal of Johnny's cane clacking along. The amount of detail you use is fantastic, especially when describing places, but occasionally I got lost in it. Like when Johnny is making coffee in his kitchen - just before Sarah turns up. I thought you were leading up to something momentous, it was such a detailed description. But it turned out he just wanted a coffee! LOL. Characters Would Johnny - strictly speaking, a mental health patient - and Bruce, a healthcare worker, really admit to feeling safer with a wall between them and the inmates of a mental institution? It didn't sound quite true to character to me! The peripheral characters are incredibly well-drawn. They have real life of their own. That is a major triumph in its own right. The speech was great; very in-character as well. I like Johnny "losing it" when he has visions. That has happened less and less as the series itself has progressed, probably due to the idea of Johnny learning to have more control over his physical reactions (just as well really, when you think about some of what his visions are about - I'm thinking about Deja Voodoo - oer!). I wish - and this is a general wish, not particularly directed at you, that Walt had more to do than just look bemusedly at Johnny coming to him with another half-baked story that he can do nothing about. So often, the regular characters in the Dead Zone are there only to prop Johnny up in one way or another. In your story, Dana and Bruce are much better rounded - do you like them better as characters? I am interested in how it works for you. Plot There are plenty of great King-like twists to the tale, and I liked the premise of a mad doctor (always good for a story, a mad doctor!) manipulating the mental health of his illegitimate child in order to exact revenge on his ex-lover. Very dark! I guessed that Jessica was his daughter, though - perhaps too early on. I for one liked the twist that the nightmare visions were Johnny's future rather than Jessica's past/present. You could have foreshadowed that even more, if you had wanted to. What happened to the four-armed monster? The way you chopped up your chapters was very clever. I wish I could do that. Each one was of comparable length, and left the reader hungry for more. You maintained the suspense all the way through. Bravo on your research into the disease Jessica is suffering from. Your words came across with great authority. You know Raven, in my humble opinion this could have been turned into a solid Dead Zone episode with no trouble at all. It has all the classic DZ hallmarks, along with a good few darker touches a la Stephen King. Brill job, matey. Thank you again for sharing with us. Love from Laura x
Fern 2003-11-01 ch 12, anon.	abuseI am so glad you finished the story. I found it very exciting and interesting. It definitely kept me wanting to read more. A few suggestions though. It would be more effective if Johnny's visions discovered more of what had happened to Jessica, rather than having the various characters explain what has happened. Also, since Johnny is saved by others, you might want to add a scene where Johnny does something heroic (perhaps saving Jessica at risk to himself) to avoid having Johnny appear to be a victim. It is always important that Johnny be the "hero". Again, I thought the story was really good. It was very original and creeped me out! Thank you for sharing it.
WriterJC 2003-11-01 ch 15,	abuseHi Raven I think you did an excellent job with this story. I was always hoping that you'd find time to finish. Excellent premise. I figured out who dunnit about the time Johnny went to see the lawyer, but there were a couple of details you surprised me with. :) Very nice work. :)
Fern 2003-10-20 ch 12, anon.	abuseI can't wait for the ending! This is a very gripping story and the dialogue and detail of the scenes is great. I'm getting frustrated with the amount of time it's taking Johnny to find the answers, though. (I'm just impatient!) Great work and keep it up.

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