First, I have to say that your "poem" has poor grammar. Where are the periods between sentences? And shouldn't it be in stanza form?

I also don't understand why this is under "Behind Enemy Lines". This should be under "Miscellaneous", I suppose. Otherwise, you could say perhaps that the narrator to this "poem" is the main character of the movie (Oh, God. I already forgot his name...)

Er, anyways, you need to seriously fix this if you want this to be successful.

Right...I am still questioning on why this poem is in the "Behind Enemy Lines" fan fiction when it appears to only have the mentioning of being "behind enemy lines". Was there a method to this maddness or was it just a spontaneous idea that you decided to act upon?

-Cielag