sounds interesting.. but if Zaha's still a Haz Knight, doesn't that make Carrot the general?

ooooooooooh... is this Caraha...? (PLEASE say yes...) or is this ZahaxCharlotte...? Oh, i want to know! Good story finish so i can know!

For some reason, I kept thinking about how upset Tira and Chocolat would be with this alternate universe. Since when do I care what the characters think? Anyway... I can't judge the plot from this. The setup is nice and clear, altho I have to wonder how Zaha will be falling for someone who would attack his daughters. Which means I'm interested. There were typos, I just ignored them... the opening was a bit confusing, but a very nice way to set the mood once you get into it and start seeing it in your head. You guys have to stop giving me little bits and not continuing them, tho, I mean it, it's just cruel.

Greatness! All Hail!